8:41 PM, Wednesday March 3rd 2021
Hi there I'll be handling your lesson 2 critique.
You're making good progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson, below I'll be listing some things that will hopefully help you in your future attempts at these exercises.
Your arrows are off to a good start, there's a few spots where you have some line wobbling and inconsistent width but with more mileage you'll become more consistent, just remember to draw confidently. My only suggestion for this section is to experiment more with foreshortening the negative space between your arrow's curves, by utilizing foreshortening here as well as in the arrows themselves you can create a stronger illusion of an object moving through 3D space as you can see demonstrated here.
In the organic forms with contours exercise your line confidence suffers and it results in quite a bit of wobbling and stiffness. Part of this may be due to you drawing fairly small forms and not being fully comfortable using your shoulder just yet, drawing larger forms will help you become more comfortable as well as show you your mistakes more clearly. It looks like you're attempting to shift the degree of your contours which is great, keep experimenting. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.
In the texture exercises you're focusing largely on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. For more on the importance of focusing on cast shadows read here. I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.
If you feel like you don't fully grasp form intersections just yet don't worry, you're on the right track but right now this exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page. We'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons. Your forms here are looking mostly solid and like they belong in a cohesive 3D space, good work.
This is a really solid attempt at the organic intersections exercise, just a few quick notes here before we wrap up the critique. I'd like you to draw through all of your forms much like how we did when drawing boxes earlier, doing so helps develop your understanding of how these forms rest in 3D space. Try to push your contours curves further so that they overshoot back into the form more as you can see demonstrated here. Finally, don't be afraid to push your shadows further, at the moment they mostly hug the form creating them. I'd recommend pushing your light source to the top left or right corner to start out with, it's easier than working with a light directly above the form pile. This is a great exercise for developing your understanding of organic form as well as light and shadow before moving on to more complex tasks later on so be sure to practice it in your warm ups.
Overall this was a pretty solid submission, you have some things to work on but I believe as long as you build up more mileage by practicing these exercises in your warm ups you'll improve. I'll be marking your submission as complete and moving you on to the next lesson.
Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups and good luck in lesson 3!
Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups.
Move on to lesson 3.