10:26 AM, Wednesday June 18th 2025

Hello Eaburns, I'll be the teaching assistant handling your lesson 4 critique.

Starting with your organic forms it looks like it may have been a while since you visited the exercise instructions, as you’ve skipped step 2 throughout both pages. It would be wise to review the instructions for previous lessons periodically, to ensure nothing important gets forgotten, and avoid preventable mistakes.

It does look like you’ve remembered to aim for the characteristics of simple sausages that are introduced here, which is a good start. On the whole you’re doing fairly well at sticking to these properties, but something I do notice is some subtle wavering to some your lines- it is actually more obvious in some of the contour curves than the forms themselves. This adds little bulges and hollows along the silhouette of the form, introducing unintended complexity and making the form appear less solid. This is honestly quite subtle stiffness, and might be the result of drawing them more with your wrist and elbow, and not quite engaging the whole arm from your shoulder. The more limited range of motion can interfere with the shape, forcing a change in trajectory and the balance of how those pivots are used when you hit the limits of what the pivots you're using can provide.

Another possible cause of lines getting a bit stiff is combining the preparation and execution phases of markmaking, which results in the brain making little course corrections in the trajectory of the line as you draw it. One of the big strengths of the ghosting method is that it allows us to separate the markmaking into 3 distinct phases, building up temporary muscle memory with the preparation phase, so the mark can then be executed with confidence.

It is good to see that you’re experimenting with varying the degree of your contour curves, and where you express a form as having both ends facing the viewer you have the degree shift correct. When one end of the form faces the viewer the degree of your contour lines should be shifting wider as we slide along the sausage form, moving farther away from the viewer. This is also influenced by the way in which the sausages themselves turn in space, but farther = wider is a good rule of thumb to follow. If you're unsure as to why that is, review the Lesson 1 ellipses video. You can also see a good example of how to vary your contour curves in this diagram showing the different ways in which our contour lines can change the way in which the sausage is perceived.

Moving on to your insect constructions there are only 7 pages in the Imgur album, where 10 are assigned. Could you please reply with a link to the 3 missing pages and I’ll respond with the rest of your feedback as soon as I can.

Next Steps:

Please provide a link to the missing pages.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
9:32 PM, Wednesday June 18th 2025

Thanks for the feedback. Oops! So sorry about only having 7 insects. I must have messed up the upload to ingur. Here are the 10 https://imgur.com/a/9yZx6iP. Some seem to be upsidedown. Let me know if you need me to try to fix it

10:57 AM, Thursday June 19th 2025

No problem. Thank you for uploading again, they’re all there now. Don’t worry about some of the pages being upside down, it happens a lot and I have tools to rotate the images if needed.

Overall you've done very well, and are approaching your constructions in the manner we hope to see, starting with simple forms and building up complexity gradually, and establishing specific 3D relationships where these forms connect together by drawing contour lines where they intersect. These elements tell me that you’re feeding your brain the right questions, asking yourself how this thing really exists in a 3D world, and how to build your constructions up like puzzles, so you can convince yourself that what you are drawing doesn’t just exist on a flat piece of paper, but has a solid structure to it.

I do have a few pieces of advice to help you improve further, although the biggest point is additional information that'll continue to help you make the most out of these exercises as you continue forwards - rather than an actual mistake or thing you did incorrectly given the information you had.

Starting with this main point, it's all about understanding the distinction between actions we take that occur in 2D space, where we're focusing on the flat shapes and lines on the page, and the actions we take that occur in 3D space, where we're actually thinking about the forms as we combine them in three dimensions, and how they relate to one another. In the latter, we're actively considering how the way in which we draw the later forms respect and even reinforce the illusion that the existing structure is 3D.

Because we're drawing on a flat piece of paper, we have a lot of freedom to make whatever marks we choose, but many of those marks would contradict the illusion you're trying to create and remind the viewer that they're just looking at a series of lines on a flat piece of paper. In order to avoid this and stick only to the marks that reinforce the illusion we're creating, we can force ourselves to adhere to certain rules as we build up our constructions. Rules that respect the solidity of our construction.

For example - once you've put a form down on the page, do not attempt to alter its silhouette. Its silhouette is just a shape on the page which represents the form we're drawing, but its connection to that form is entirely based on its current shape. If you change that shape, you won't alter the form it represents - you'll just break the connection, leaving yourself with a flat shape. We can see this most easily in this example of what happens when we cut back into the silhouette of a form.

For example, I've marked on the head of your grasshopper in red where it looks like you cut back inside the silhouette of a form you had already drawn.

While cutting back into a silhouette is the easiest way to depict the issues with modifying a form after it's been drawn, there are other ways in which we can fall into this trap. On the tail of the shrimp I also marked in blue some places where you'd extended off existing forms using partial, flat shapes, not quite providing enough information for us to understand how they actually connect to the existing structure in 3D space. While this approach worked for adding edge detail to leaves in the previous lesson, this is because leaves are paper-thin structures, so essentially they are already flat and altering their silhouette won’t flatten them further. When we want to build on forms that aren’t already flat we need to use another strategy.

Instead, when we want to build on our construction or alter something we add new 3D forms to the existing structure. Forms with their own complete silhouettes - and by establishing how those forms either connect or relate to what's already present in our 3D scene. We can do this either by defining the intersection between them with contour lines (like in lesson 2's form intersections exercise), or by wrapping the silhouette of the new form around the existing structure as shown here.

This is all part of understanding that everything we draw is 3D, and therefore needs to be treated as such in order for both you and the viewer to believe in that lie.

You can see this in practice in this beetle horn demo, as well as in this ant head demo. You can also see some good examples of this in the lobster and shrimp demos on the informal demos page. As Uncomfortable has been pushing this concept more recently, it hasn't been fully integrated into the lesson material yet (it will be when the overhaul reaches Lesson 4). Until then, those submitting for official critiques basically get a preview of what is to come.

The next thing I wanted to talk about is leg construction. It is great to see that you’ve used the sausage method for almost all of your leg constructions, and you’re doing an excellent job of sticking to the properties of simple sausages, as well as using a contour line at each joint to define how the pieces fit together in 3D space.

It's not uncommon for students to be aware of the sausage method as introduced here, but to decide that the legs they're looking at don't actually seem to look like a chain of sausages, so they use some other strategy.

The key to keep in mind here is that the sausage method is not about capturing the legs precisely as they are - it is about laying in a base structure or armature that captures both the solidity and the gestural flow of a limb in equal measure, where the majority of other techniques lean too far to one side, either looking solid and stiff or gestural but flat. Once in place, we can then build on top of this base structure with more additional forms as shown in these examples here, and here. This tactic can be used extensively to develop the specific complexity of each particular leg, as shown in this example of an ant leg. I’ll also show how this can be applied to animals in this dog leg demo as we would like you to stick with the sausage method as closely as you can throughout lesson 5 too.

Line weight can be a bit tricky, and something that can make it more manageable is to restrict it to localized areas where overlaps occur, as shown in this video from lesson 1. This will help keep the superimposed stroke smooth and confident. I’d recommend that you avoid tracing back over large sections of existing forms, as this tends to take your initially smooth and confident lines and make them wobblier, which is what appears to be happening on the top of the firefly

Before I wrap this up I wanted to take a moment to discuss texture. I really like some of the textural work on this page where you’re exploring describing the texture implicitly by drawing the shadows cast by small textural forms onto the object’s surface, without outlining the forms themselves, nicely done. Remember that in this course we reserve areas of solid black for cast shadows only. So if we think about the forms that are physically present in the construction, there’d be no reason for the eyes of the firefly to be sitting in cast shadow, as they bulge and protrude from the underlying head form.

Alright, I think that should cover it. You’ve done a very good job and I’ll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete. Please keep the points discussed here in mind as you tackle the next lesson, they will continue to apply to animal constructions.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 5.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
5:58 PM, Monday June 23rd 2025

Thank you so much for the thorough review. This is really helpful. I'll have to read it over a few times, and make sure to keep your advice in mind during my practice and upcoming homeworks from lesson 5.

Thanks again!

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