Lesson 2: Contour Lines, Texture and Construction
12:16 AM, Monday March 15th 2021
My dissections results turned out a lot darker than the example. I like how it looks but if it's a bad habit to start, let me know so I can fix it. Thank you!
Hi there I'll be handling your lesson 2 critique.
You're making good progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson, below I'll be listing some things that will hopefully help you in your future attempts at these exercises.
Your arrows are off to a good start, there are width and line weight inconsistencies but with more mileage you'll become more consistent. No other major complaints here but I'd like you to experiment with foreshortening the negatives pace between your arrow's curves more. By utilizing it in this space as well as the arrows themselves you'll create a stronger illusion of an arrow moving through 3D space as you can see demonstrated here.
In the organic forms with contours exercise some of your forms get a bit too complex but you're on the right track for the most part. Our goal when creating these forms is to keep both ends the same size and to avoid any pinching, bloating, or stretching along the form's length as discussed here. When trying this exercise again in the future remember to draw confidently (some of your contour curves get a bit stiff) and try to shift the degree of your contours more. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.
In the texture exercises you're focusing largely on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. For more on the importance of focusing on cast shadows read here. I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.
If you feel like you don't fully grasp form intersections just yet don't worry, you're on the right track but right now this exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page. We'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons. Your forms here are looking solid and like they belong in a single cohesive 3D space, good work.
This is a solid attempt at the organic intersections exercise, your forms are beginning to wrap around one another believably. Working on the suggestions in the earlier organic forms exercise will help you here as well so be sure to implement the advice given there. Other than that your shadows aren't always consistent and you can definitely push them more than you are currently. I recommend pushing your light source to the top left or right corner as it's easier to work with than directly above your form pile. This is a great exercise to help you become more comfortable working with organic forms as well as light and shadow before moving on to more complex pieces.
Overall this was a solid submission, you do have some things you can work on but I believe with more mileage you'll improve. I'll be marking your submission as complete and moving you on to the next lesson.
Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups and good luck in lesson 3!
Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups.
Move on to lesson 3.