Lesson 2: Contour Lines, Texture and Construction
7:59 AM, Saturday December 12th 2020
Just finished lesson 2. I'm open for feedback.
Hi there I'll be handling your lesson 2 critique.
You're making a lot of progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson, below I'll be listing some things that will hopefully help you in your future attempts at these exercises.
In the arrows exercise the first thing I notice is that you apply too much line weight, it should only be used to clarify overlapping sections by subtly adding some weight. In the future I'd like you to experiment more with foreshortening as well, by utilizing it in the space between curves of the arrow as well as the arrow itself you can really sell the illusion of your arrow moving through 3D space, more info on this idea here.
Your organic forms with contours are pretty smooth and you managed to keep them quite simple, good work. Remember that ultimately our goal here is to create forms with both ends being the same size, and to avoid pinching, bloating or stretching along the form's length as seen here. When it comes to contours I'd like you to work on shifting their degree along the forms length. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.
In the texture exercises you're focusing largely on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. For more on the importance of focusing on cast shadows read here, I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.
If you feel like you don't fully grasp form intersections just yet don't worry, right now this exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page, we'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons. Your forms here are looking pretty solid, you could fill your pages a bit more and this is a good exercise to build up your hatching mileage in the future as well.
Your organic intersections are mostly well done, I do think you got a bit hasty with this exercise to try and complete the lesson however. Your line quality dips and you start sketchily redrawing lines. Your shadows are mostly hugging the form creating them rather than being cast on to the form/ground below. Try pushing your light source to the top left or right corner as it's easier than directly above. This is a great exercise for building your understanding of 3D space along with your understanding of light and shadow before moving on to more complicated pieces.
Overall this was a solid submission, you do have some things to work on and may get a bit hasty at times but I believe you can correct these issues if you keep them in mind and build up your mileage. I'll be marking your submission as complete and moving you on to the next lesson.
Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups, and good luck in lesson 3!
Do previous exercises as warm ups.
Move on to lesson 3.