Hi Drawsirah, congrats on finishing lesson 1!

First, a general comment about your submission, please take care to always show the whole page in your picture (unlike your second page of ghosted planes for example) and to have it take up as much space as possible, in order to facilitate the job of the person who’ll be critiquing you. Your first page of ghosted planes for example is more difficult to critique due to its angle and how small it is in the picture. For future submissions, please spare a little more time to take good pictures of your work if you want to get as much from a critique as possible.

With that out of the way, I’ll be handling your critique relying on the guide provided here: https://pastebin.com/dYnFt9PQ

My critique will be divided in 3 sections: lines, ellipses and boxes. Let’s get started !

1. Lines section

First off, starting with your superimposed lines exercise, I’m unfortunately seeing some fraying on the first end of your lines. Fraying on the other end is completely ok and will get better with practice, however fraying on the first end can be avoided by putting down your pen carefully at the beginning of the line, so please pay attention to this in future warmups.

In the ghosted lines and ghosted planes exercise I’m seeing dots on the page, which indicates that you used the ghosting method correctly. Starting a line with a starting and ending dot is important and should never be skipped, even in exercises where you’ll be focusing on other things.

Your lines look very wobbly in the ghosted lines exercise and in your first page of ghosted planes, but are looking WAY better in the second page of ghosted planes, so either you’ve tremendously improved in a very short span of time, or maybe you’ve rushed your lines a little bit in the beginning. Either way, congrats on the improvement! You also show some good line confidence in the exercises involving boxes, despite the added worry about accuracy. A confident but inaccurate line will always be more correct than a wobbly but accurate one. However next time you attempt the ghosted lines exercise in your warmups, I’d like you to push yourself to draw longer lines though, as the ones I’m seeing here are quite short.

2. Ellipses section

I see that you are drawing through your ellipses 2-3 times as instructed and they look confidently drawn for the most part, so good job! They are also pretty tight for the most part, they’re sometimes looking a little loose and messy, but as for lines confident but inaccurate ellipses will always be better than accurate but wobbly ones, and your accuracy will get better with practice. In the table of ellipses exercise, I like that you experimented with varying sizes and degrees and weren’t afraid of drawing very elongated ones, so good job! You also managed to fit your ellipses snugly against each other.

In the ellipses in planes exercise, it seems that you did not re-use the planes that you drew in the previous exercise, may I ask why that is? In future attemps, I would also advise you to maybe start experimenting with different plane shapes to fit your ellipses in.

Your ellipses in planes are also looking very good for the most part, even though they start to look a little more egg-ish as you struggled to have them reach all sides of the plane, which is completely normal. Something that you can try out is focusing on having the ellipse reach 2 opposite corners of the plane rather than its sides, and trying its major axis with the diagonal of the plane going through said corners. You’ll see that even the thinnest ellipse can easily reach all corners and fit inside a plane that way. See example here: https://ibb.co/album/zhKcZD

Your ellipses are mostly aligned with the minor axis in the ellipses in funnels exercise, though some of them are a bit skewed, so please remember that the minor axis should cut the ellipses in 2 symmetrical halves. Next time you attempt this exercise, you can try widening the degree of your ellipses as you progress towards the sides.

3. Boxes section

In the rough perspective exercise, you’ve kept your width lines aren’t parallel to the horizon line and the height lines perpendicular to it for the most part, so good job! Keep paying attention to that in future warmups while planning your lines using the ghosting method.

The rotated boxes exercise is a tricky one, which in my opinion you’ve handled really well. You kept your corners close and have a good amount of rotation, so good job!

Very good work on the organic perspective exercise, I’m seeing some nice size variation as well as overlap there and it gives off a real 3d feeling. However please be careful of always having the lines of your boxes converge towards the vanishing points, as I’m seeing some diverging lines there.

Some general comments to finish off this section: even though it is optional, I appreciate that you used hatching on your boxes, it is valuable line practice and makes your submission much easier to read. I also like that you applied line weight, however it often seems that you went over your lines more than once and some of it is looking very heavy, so in the future please keep in mind that line weight should be applied sparingly (that is, only on overlapping lines, and not on the whole box in the front for example) and never in more than one additional stroke.

That’s the end of this critique! It was all in all a solid submission, so I’m letting you move on to the 250 boxes challenge. Above all, stay motivated and committed!