Starting off with your arrows, I wouldn't exactly call this page filled - there's definitely a lot of room left blank to the top right and bottom left where more arrows could have been squeezed in. That said, the arrows you did draw were done quite well - you executed them with a great deal of confidence, which helps to sell the sense of fluidity with which they move through the world.
This carries over into the leaves quite well, where you're capturing not only how each one sits statically in the three dimensions of space, but also how they actually move through the space they occupy. When adding edge detail you're generally doing a good job of adhering to the existing edge from the previous pahse of construction, although I am noticing some areas where you're attempting to capture more than one individual 'bump' in a single stroke. Always stick to one at a time, having a stroke rise off the existing edge and return to it, then starting another stroke for the next one, as explained in these notes. This also adheres more closely to this principle of markmaking from Lesson 1, whereas zigzagging back and forth would be incorrect.
As to the more complex leaf in the center, where you've established the flow lines for each individual "arm", you appear to have skipped the step of establishing smaller leaf structures around each of those arms, as shown here. Be sure not to skip any constructional steps going forward.
Continuing onto your branches, you're largely doing well here, but you do need to be more mindful of extending each edge segment fully halfway to the next ellipse. Right now you're falling short quite frequently, which minimizes the overlap between them. As shown here in the instructions, that overlap is an important part to achieving a smooth, seamless transition from one segment to the next.
Moving onto your plant constructions, overall you're doing quite well. The points I raised in regards to your leaves' edge detail is still present here and there, but aside from that, I only notice a couple things:
When employing the branches technique for building up cylindrical stems and such, don't forget to start with the central minor axis line. This is important, because it's going to inform the alignment of your ellipses. Same goes for any cylindrical structure. Approach it as you did with your mushroom stems.
I know I addressed the zigzagging of edge detail already, but I did want to stress further that each step of construction effectively builds upon the one before it. Not just as shapes and lines on the page, but in 3D space. For this reason, it's important to avoid the temptation to treat the earlier step as just a suggestion or a loose idea of what you're trying to capture, and don't give into the temptation to have later steps entirely replace the earlier ones. So for example, on the left side of this page, you end up with a looser relationship between the different phases of construction, due to how you're drawing the smaller separate arms on top of the previously existing structure.
Remember - what we're doing here is not putting down a rough sketch to use as a guide. We are effectively introducing a structure to the world, as though it were a simple leaf shape cut out of a piece of paper, and as we add edge detail to it or build up its structure, we are actively making physical changes to that existing form. If we want to add spikes to its edge, we're physically adding more pieces of paper to it. If we want to create a wobbly edge, we are physically drooping and lifting sections of its perimeter in 3D space. And if we want to cut into its silhouette, then the lines we're drawing represent the paths a pair of scissors would follow to cut it out, as shown here.
So! With that, I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete. There are a few things here to keep in mind, but all in all you're progressing well.
Next Steps:
Move onto Lesson 4.
A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.
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