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8:02 PM, Tuesday November 2nd 2021

Hello, Photon:

Let's see what can I see from your work.

Arrows

I have nothing bad to say here. You got the fundamentals and execute them perfectly. There are some instances where the lines seem more stiff/hesitant but I feel that is because you tried to execute long thing sections that are too complex for one single stroke. If you want to make structures that complex it could be better if you try to construct them with multiple strokes. This way of constructing organic shapes is introduced later in the lesson when drawing branches.

Shadows were applied correctly in most cases and the flow is correct too.

Leaves

Your leaves felt too plain and I think that here you restrained yourself. Most of them are plain or slightly bent. You didn't overlap as much as you did with your arrows and here is the most powerful tool you had to create a 3D illusion.

Here you could have benefited more by using line weight in multiple cases. For example, the outer silhouette of leaves constructed with multiple intermediate steps or in the lines where the bends happen (not only the edges as you did).

In general, you did a great you here too.

Branches

Some of the branches' inner ellipses have abrupt changes in their length being a bit confusing to tell what orientation is facing. I think that's not completely your fault because that kind of twist should be better constructed with other techniques, but maybe you can alleviate that problem by keeping a predictable pattern in the rotation of each section.

You did experiment with changes in width and as you probably figured it out, is a similar case to the dramatic foreshortening we saw in the boxes lessons. If you push it too much, appears to be extremely large, far or cartoon.

You joined well the sections between them and kept them aligned so good job!

Plants

I think I won't be able to help you much here. You did an excellent job. The point here was to apply the branches, leaves, and arrows sections and use them to help you construct your plants. Maybe you could improve (even more) those drawings by adding more twists, bends, and overlaps on your forms.

Verdict

You are prepared for the next lesson. Good luck with those insects!

Next Steps:

Continue to lesson 4

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5:12 PM, Wednesday November 3rd 2021

Thanks for the critique!

Regarding leaves - for some reason I find twisting leaves harder than arrows. I will try to keep your tips in mind when moving forward.

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A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.

In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.

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