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8:31 PM, Tuesday March 9th 2021

It's a good attempt in general. I think you have improved in some things but you still rushed over some of the exercises.

On ghosted planes and ghosted lines you seem to not be doing the ghosting phase enough. I'm going to request 1 more page of ghosted planes just to be sure you got the point of the ghosting method.

Try to draw smaller planes first so i can see if it's a problem because of the scale.

Focus on: putting the marks, ghost over them and make confident lines. Re-read the lesson so you can check that you are doing the necessary steps to draw these lines.

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Next Steps:

1 more page of ghosted planes

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
6:17 PM, Wednesday March 10th 2021
6:17 AM, Friday March 12th 2021

You are avoiding the proper steps. Please read carefully:

First. Mark the paper where the corner of a plane.

Second. Taking a pair of marks, ghost over them and be sure you start your stroke on one of them. You are currently missing both marks when joining a pair. The goal is to make a confident line between the two marks but you should at least hit the starting point. You should also try to make confident lines and avoid trying to correct the trajectory of your strokes.

You don't need to match the end mark on a pair of marks. Your focus should be on starting on the start mark and doing the stroke without worry about matching the other mark.

I will continue to request revisions until you get this right so please be sure to read carefully, re-read the lesson if necessary and question me or anyone on discord about any doubt or problem you could have. This is the foundation on which the rest of lessons are build on top of. If you get this wrong the rest of the efforts would be useless.

With all of this said. I want you to make 5 pages of ghosted planes. Focus on starting in one of the marks you put and making confident lines. You don't need to reach the end mark, just aim towards it and that would be enough.

Next Steps:

5 pages of ghosted planes

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
5:19 PM, Monday March 22nd 2021

the later pages I think are better https://imgur.com/gallery/o3qNXf2

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