Hi Anivalentine! I am Feldspar and I will be critiquing your work today. I hope you've been keeping up with your 50% rule and warmups while waiting! Without further ado lets begin!
Arrows
Starting off with an arrows. For the most part your arrows are good with implied perspective and overlaps.This shows that you have 3d space awareness and that you can twist and turn them in space. But some arrows have wrong compression(Both in size, and the spacing between each fold they stay mostly the same as they go further from a viewer) and sometimes your hatching is on the wrong side of the fold. Don't forget that the tip of the arrow is also goes under the same rules as the rest of the arrow(https://imgur.com/a/swx7A7t)
Organic form
These are also mostly good but i think that the shape of your sausages is bit wider in the middle that it should be(Look what happens if we take the ends of yours sausages as reference points of the balls https://imgur.com/a/tLcwtCv). But ellipses are mostly fine: the aligned and change degree as they go around the sausage
Texture
One thing that you should keep an eye on is transitioning your gradient from a black bar to a texture,in all of your gradients black bar is pretty noticeable. Remember everything we add to our drawings serves a specific purpose and you should draw cast shadows as shapes and not lines
Dissections
Solid dissections. Don't be afraid to break silhouette of sausage
Form intersections
This exercise is also done very well,majority of intersections look believable and foreshortening is kept simple, good job.
Organic intersections
Also done really well. Your organic forms are kept simple and solid with cast shadows projecting correctly on surfaces they lying. Don't be afraid to experiment with forms of sausages and how they are lying.
Next Steps:
I give greenlight to Lesson 3.
Add these exercises to your warmup pool and don't forget about your %50 rule (I will advise if you haven't followed it, you should go ahead and pay your 50% play debt)
Have fun!!!
Hii FELDSPAR, Thank you so much for critiquing!!!
You are right about hatching, now that I have noticed it, it hurts to look at! I will fix both compression and hatching.
You are right about organic form being fat in the middle. It seems I was subconsciously trying to achieve a specific shape instead of thinking the ends as metal balls.
The texture one I was having most trouble, I will try to keep in mind about gradient and not outlining texture (pinning it on my all right now)
Wait, Dissections and form interactions actually came out good? I was sure I made a million mistakes! I am overjoyed.
Alright! I will experiment with sausages next time when this exercise comes up.
I will move to lesson 3 now,
Anyways, thanks again for a in-depth critique. I really appreciate it! And I am trying hard to pay my 50% dept, (even though I skip sometimes... maybe a lot of times)
Glad i could help :p
Also one thing i want to point out after your response that exercises besides arrows are merely an introduction that will be expanded and will gradually become more and more challenging. So by providing feedback i was more focused on you following instructions of the course that means you go in the right direction not making things perfectly.
This is comfy words about texture analysis that i think can be helpful: https://i.imgur.com/uhdcB8B.png
Good luck with the third lesson! I think its time for me to start this one too...
Where the rest of my recommendations tend to be for specific products, this one is a little more general. It's about printer paper.
As discussed in Lesson 0, printer paper (A4 or 8.5"x11") is what we recommend. It's well suited to the kind of tools we're using, and the nature of the work we're doing (in terms of size). But a lot of students still feel driven to sketchbooks, either by a desire to feel more like an artist, or to be able to compile their work as they go through the course.
Neither is a good enough reason to use something that is going to more expensive, more complex in terms of finding the right kind for the tools we're using, more stress-inducing (in terms of not wanting to "ruin" a sketchbook - we make a lot of mistakes throughout the work in this course), and more likely to keep you from developing the habits we try to instill in our students (like rotating the page to find a comfortable angle of approach).
Whether you grab the ream of printer paper linked here, a different brand, or pick one up from a store near you - do yourself a favour and don't make things even more difficult for you. And if you want to compile your work, you can always keep it in a folder, and even have it bound into a book when you're done.
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