Forgive the scribbles on superimposed 1, the pen kept fading as i drew out the lines and I figured, like with a ballpoint y'know, (which none of these were done with), just mess about and it'll fix it. Did not fix it. Only made it look worse.
Aahhaa yeah fine liners don't play too much like ball points! Sorry for the delay in your critique and thank you for your patience. Let's get right to it.
Starting with your super imposed lines, you are executing them somewhat confidently but still letting yourself try to consciously steer the pen resulting in wobbles. Remember that right now we are prioritizing flow over accuracy. Accuracy comes with time and practice but it's a lot harder to break the habit of wobbly, slow lines. With your ghosted lines you're on the right track with using your shoulder confidently and now it's just a matter of getting the mileage in to build up the accuracy.
Moving on to your ellipses, they are definitely rough at first but you do improve by the funnels. With your ellipses in planes you're doing pretty well drawing confidently and drawing through your ellipses, but where you fall short is in making contact with the planes at times. This causes your ellipses to be able to "float" within the bounds instead of being firmly cemented in place. With construction drawing all of our lines/shapes/forms must build upon our previous guides/scaffolds/earlier passes and so we do not want any ambiguity like with your ellipses floating in their planes. This will make more sense as you get to lesson 2 and 3. Your ellipses in tables are much better in terms of not leaving any room for ambiguity, and you do a good job keeping your ellipses uniform within each row. Your ellipses in the funnels are definitely showing improvement especially with their shape - no flat regions or sharp corners. Your minor axes are aligned to the funnel axes and you made sure to keep contact with the funnel edges so good job.
Moving on to your rough perspective boxes you're hitting the first major hurdle a lot of students face. This is the first time you've been tasked with drawing "something" rather than abstract exercises so there is a lot more to begin to balance and it usually manifests in stressed/unconfident lines. Remember to always use the ghosting method and your shoulder and to plan each line. The orientation of your boxes is correct with your horizontal lines parallel to the horizon and verticals perpendicular. Your converging lines are on the right track and you've correctly applied your extension lines. There is a fair bit of redrawing lines and I want to discourage this at the onset before a habit forms. A major reason we use ink is to learn line economy and to make sure we plan each line. Drawing more lines just causes visual clutter and draws attention to any mistakes we were trying to hide or fix in the first place. So just remember: plan, ghost, execute confidently.
I want to commend you on finishing the rotated boxes. It's a hard task and the only thing we require of our students is to finish it to the best of their abilities. This is so you can be exposed to new types of spatial problems and solution methods. With that being said, you did a good job on your horizontal boxes in pushing the rotation, but most everywhere else your boxes were not rotating so much as being skewed around, so give this gif some more attention and try to study how the rotation is driven by the motion of the vanishing points along the horizon. Additionally, your boxes were not packed together as tightly as they could have been so you could leverage adjacent lines. This is most apparent in the bottom right where your boxes really drift apart. If they had been tighter together the neighboring boxes would help guide your decision making processes. Overall though, you kept things neat and confident so great job there!
Finally let's look at your organic perspective. You did a great job in your exploration of space. Your compositions are lively and full of depth. The illusion of depth is really pushed with your scaled down boxes making them appear to recede into the distance. Couple this with your overlapping forms and large foreground boxes and everything feels cohesive and three dimensional. Your perspective is honestly not bad. You are being mindful of converging lines and there isn't a lot of divergence going on. Some of your lines are starting to curve indicating you're falling back to using the wrist and elbow so make sure you're ghosting every line with your shoulder.
Overall you have shown a lot of growth through the lesson and I'll be marking it as complete. Keep working on confident lines and practicing your ellipses in warm ups.
Next Steps:
Next stop: 250 box challenge!
Thank you very much for taking the time to give thorough feedback, and yeah nah, don't stress over the delay. There's a LOT of homework being submitted and reviews need to be accurate and thorough, I very much get it and don't mind. Would rather it be like that over quick and shallow. :D
I'll continue to practice getting more confidence in my lines, and really try not to redraw them, no ctrl+z in ink. Also very much caught myself speeding up and just making lines without really planning them, ghosting before really looking. I will work on that. And yeah, rotated boxes hurt. Knew things were going wonky when the boxes got longer and more rectangular over y'know...rotating. Definitely a challenge and I'll try to keep sliding/moving vp's in mind. Also yes, I caught myself more than once going back to my wrist and elbow and will try to keep up with the shoulder. Practice and such.
I do have one question, you say I should practice my ellipses in planes more, like doing it for warmups. Have we covered anything else that would be a good warmup yet? Or should a warmup just be like 10-15mins of just a general overview of what we've done so far? (with emphasis on my elipses and confidence of course)
Thanks again for your time and the critique, I'll move on to the 250 boxes. Have a nice day and stay healthy.
edit- ellipse has two ll's, oops lul
In general I like the ellipses in planes as a warm up because it combines lines and ellipses. I also do a lot of ellipses in funnels where I vary the degree as I go from center to end (skinnier to wider). Any of the line or ellipse exercises from lesson 1 are great for warm ups though, that's kind of the point of the first half of lesson 1 - to give you things to keep using for practice.
I see, thank you.
This is a remarkable little pen. Technically speaking, any brush pen of reasonable quality will do, but I'm especially fond of this one. It's incredibly difficult to draw with (especially at first) due to how much your stroke varies based on how much pressure you apply, and how you use it - but at the same time despite this frustration, it's also incredibly fun.
Moreover, due to the challenge of its use, it teaches you a lot about the nuances of one's stroke. These are the kinds of skills that one can carry over to standard felt tip pens, as well as to digital media. Really great for doodling and just enjoying yourself.
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