In your arrows, I notice that they are a little stiff. If necessary, you should ghost more, draw freely. I'd recommend to shrink the farther end a little more, too.
However, the leaves, in my opinion, looks nice.
I admit that the branches exercise -at least, for me- is a difficult exercise. I see a lot of "chicken scratch". So, although I struggled to much with that exercise, maybe ghosting more will help? And changing the page position can help, too.
I think that -and to put it buntly- overall, all your construction look weak. That is, you didn't ghosted enough to mantain a solid form, which is the base if the entire drawing. And I think you focused too much on deatil. Although the demos have detail, you should avoid the detail in the first 4 pages.
For example, in your "Sanseviera snake plant", in the pot, you added too many contour lines. I think that they don't convey enough roundness. Remember that sometimes just one or two well drawn lines -that serve it's purpose- can make a way better job that a group of bad made ones. Keep that in mind, is important, since we're relying on solid shapes to convey 3d.
Another thing I noticed: you didn't draw through your pots, and that sustracts a lot of support from your drawing. Although they may seen like a lot of leaves coming from anywhere, they have their reason to be -perhaps they come form a core, a bulk, a branch, i don't know-. Cause that you shall observe enough to give support to your drawing.
And you shall construct additively. Base all your movements in 3d, reliable forms. Think in the best approach for your drawing.
Once you have a good, well cimented construction, your detail will shine. You need to focus on construction.
And some lines look wobbly, that's the importance of ghosting. Do it always.
So, this is just my opinion, and sorry for bad english
Next Steps:
I think you should do two pages (or three, if you wish) of drawing of potted plants -or maybe another types of plants too?-, without detail, based entirely on construction. But that's up to you
While you have already received critique from a community member, I do want to point out that if you want official critique from Uncomfortable or one of the TAs, you'll need to resubmit this for official critique using your credits. If you don't care about official crits and just want to support what Uncomfy is doing here at DaB, then let me know and I'll go ahead and agree with Rikchan's crit so that you can get your lesson 3 badge ^u^
Thanks for the help my friend.
I have decided to support on patreon and start again from scratch. As my first time through I only submitted maybe 25% of my work throughout. And who wouldnt want to draw another 250 boxes right? :)
Cool best of luck with your journey!
Like the Staedtlers, these also come in a set of multiple weights - the ones we use are F. One useful thing in these sets however (if you can't find the pens individually) is that some of the sets come with a brush pen (the B size). These can be helpful in filling out big black areas.
Still, I'd recommend buying these in person if you can, at a proper art supply store. They'll generally let you buy them individually, and also test them out beforehand to weed out any duds.
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