Hello! I’ll be doing your critique today.

Superimposed lines

The lines a pretty wobbly and fraying at the ends too, this usually happens with overthinking, loosen up, rotate the page as much as you need to, and then make a smooth confident stroke.

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Don’t worry about accuracy this early in the course, build up your confidence! Aside from that the lines aren’t fraying at the start so nice to see that you took your time.

Ghosted lines

The lines look a lot more confident here! keep it up!

Ghosted planes & Ellipses in planes

Nice to see that the lines are more confident, good variation of plane angles and the ellipses are looped. There is quite a bit of undershooting here and some of the ellipses look egg-shaped. Try to take the lines of the plane as a reference while you’re ghosting and then without course correction make a confident stroke.

Table of Ellipses

Quite a few ellipses don’t fit very snuggly with each other but you already knew that. There is more undershooting and course correction. Are you making sure to draw from your shoulder? or maybe you’re too tense?

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Your smaller circles and angled ellipses look the best so try to recreate what you did with those.

Funnels

The ellipses have less course correction than before so that’s good, the ellipses are well aligned to where the major and minor axis should be, and they all fit well enough with each other. Good work here.

Plotted Perspective Boxes

You followed the instructions properly, although I think you used a pencil for the hatching. That aside I hope this exercise helped you understand perspective, if not I recommend watching some videos about 1-point and 2-point perspective.

Rough Perspective Boxes

Seems like you get the gist of the exercise, even if you rushed this part. And some of the lines weren’t traced back. Slow down, take your time, keep the 50-50 rule in mind and have fun!

Rotated Boxes

Despite being a difficult exercise, you understood it well. Each box has its own vanishing point and the x-ray vision shows that a lot of the boxes are the right size and that you understand the perspective, the overall shape is circular but you forgot about the corner most boxes. Still good work here!

Organic perspective boxes

The boxes are rotating which is good, great portrayal of depth, a good variation of boxes too. but you were supposed to make three frames containing these on both pages like so:

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Overall, you have done a fair job, you did improve from the first page but take your time or you might get burned out.

I'd like you to do one page of superimposed lines, another table of ellipses and the rest of the organic perspective boxes before moving on.

Links to help get started:

For line smoothness and confidence:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0_AdsK8x9Lw

For the table of ellipses:

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