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10:19 AM, Friday October 30th 2020
edited at 10:33 AM, Oct 30th 2020

Hi SAMUELVI. Good job on finishing Lesson 1.

Lines

Your lines look good and confident. In Super Imposed Lines, I liked how there is no fraying at the beginning. It is good to see you took your time and planned your line before drawing it. Even though there are some frayings at the end of the lines, it will get even better with time.

Your Ghosted Lines and Ghosted Planes are well done. The lines look confident. There is some wobble, but not too much. They are accurate most of the time; there is no overshooting or undershooting.

Ellipses

Your ellipses look good in general. They are confident, sitting snuggly in their allotted spaces. I like how you played with the angels in Table of Ellipses. There are no overlappings. But it looks like you drew around the ellipses more than three times, which is the suggested number. Drawing through three times would be enough.

Your Ellipses in Planes looks good as well. There is no overshooting. They are inside the planes, touching all four edges.

You made a good job aligning your ellipses with the minor axis in most of the Funnels. It is good that the degree of the ellipses increases as you move outwards.

Boxes

It seems like your lines improved throughout the box homework. In Rough Perspective, there is some wobbling in your lines, but by the time you got to the Organic Perspective, your lines look more confident and smooth.

In Rough Perspective, the lines that converge at the vanishing point missed the target quite a bit. Don't forget to use the ghosting method here as well. Before drawing your line, use the ghosting method to plan your line and then draw it. You can check here for a more thorough explanation. It is good that you paid attention to the vertical and horizontal lines. The vertical lines are perpendicular to the horizon and the horizontal lines are parallel to the horizon.

In Rotated Boxes, you didn't draw the boxes on the corner. Also, it looks like you didn't rotate some of the boxes. As the box rotates, the vanishing point slides, and the converging of the rotated box changes. You can read more about this from here. It is good that you kept boxes close together but it seems like you didn't follow the edges of the existing boxes while you draw your new ones. I realized you drew three boxes on either side of the center one both in the horizontal axis and vertical axis. The homework specifically states that there should be two boxes on either side of the center one. Pay attention to that. I recommend you go to the lesson part and read the instructions again and then do the exercise one more time

Your Organic Perspective looks very good. The way that the boxes get smaller as they go further away from you creates a nice illusion of 3D space. It seems like you tried to repeat your lines to fix them. Try to avoid this. If a line doesn't go the way you wanted, don't fix it. Repeating lines only makes your drawing messier and attract more attention to the mistake. If you are going to add line weight, draw with confidence. Use the ghosting method and your shoulder.

All in all, your homework looks good. But in the rotated boxes, there are some rotation issues, and there are more boxes than it is suggested, so I recommend doing one more page of the Rotated boxes.

Next Steps:

I would like to see one more page of Rotated boxes. After you finished that one page, you can answer to this with your Rotated Boxes attached to it and I will look at it. Good luck!

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 10:33 AM, Oct 30th 2020
6:54 PM, Tuesday November 3rd 2020

Thanks for the criticism! here is the link for the Rotated Boxes exercise https://imgur.com/gallery/usWDwsB

3:21 PM, Wednesday November 4th 2020
edited at 3:23 PM, Nov 4th 2020

Hi, thank you for your revision.

First of all, as I said before, after drawing the center box, draw only two more boxes for each side. When you finished the boxes that sit on the vertical and horizontal axis, the number of your boxes should be equal to number in this example.

Secondly, The rotation of the boxes was too little. Some of the boxes didn't rotate at all. Don't forget that when the box rotates, the vanishing point slides and the convergence of the edges of the new box moves towards the new vanishing point. In this example you can see how the convergence changes as the boxes rotated. If you trace the lines, you can see this change more clearly.

Lastly, try to leave equal and small space between your boxes. You can check here to learn how to use the neighboring edges to draw your new box's edges.

I recommend you first read the rotated box lesson one more time, pay attention to the details, and then draw one more page. You can also check this Youtube video where Uncomfortable explains the exercise himself.

I hope this will be helpful. Good luck :)

Next Steps:

After reading the lesson materials one more time with care, draw one more page of Rotated Boxes.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 3:23 PM, Nov 4th 2020

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