After 2 years, i got back to DaB, and could use some critique !
Some images have a different look, as they've been redone aftre the older critique from 2 years ago.
(I have a lot of troubles with the organic intersection, sorry if it's messed up ^^')
Hello, my name is PizzaPlease and I am here to critique your Lesson 2 submission. Congratulations on getting through the lesson.
Your Organic Arrows pages are ghosted well and you have applied line weight correctly, but I would recommend pushing your exploration of depth more in the future. They look quite flat (https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/perspective). Exaggerate the variation of width more and try having more switchbacks in your arrows with narrower space between strips the further back they are (https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step2). It's a minor note, but your hatching is also quite thick and you occasionally incorrectly place it on the closer plane.
Your Organic Forms aren't bad, but have room for improvement. You did well respecting the minor axis of the sausages and while I can see good understanding behind the forms of the sausages, they look tense. Remember to ghost these and execute them with a confident, continuous line. Your ellipses should vary more in their degree, right now they are all quite similar (https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/degree). I would also recommend reviewing the circles in perspective section from Lesson 1 (https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/5/circles). Some of your ellipse degrees are contradictory.
Your Texture Analysis page looks pretty good. There are some areas where it looks like you have fallen into the trap of symbol drawing and relying on closed shapes (https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/6/drawingforms). Without seeing the references you used, I may be mistaken and please correct me if so. I can see you have studied these textures.
Your Dissections pages are pretty good, but have similar issues. Even though you aren't drawing them, pay close attention to the form and imagine it wrapping around the sausage. These cast shadows should look natural. The snake scales, the rim of the passion fruit, and the bacon all have massive areas of black which I think might be local color and don't seem to reflect cast shadows which would exist on form's surface. Some, like the nut, moon, and sponge, look better studied. Remember to take your time and observe very closely.
The forms in your Form Intersections look good, but remember they should be equilateral to each other (https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/8/stretched). Some have distortion from extreme perspective as well. The pages are well-filled with forms. The linework is clean and the weight is applied tastefully. Most of your intersections are inaccurate. While this isn't the focus of the exercise, you may find the Form Intersections First Aid Pack helpful (https://imgur.com/a/6Inx5Bz).
The Organic Intersections pages have good forms. You were bold with and clearly thought out how the forms laid on top of each other. These sausages were executed more confidently. They don't seem be lying on a flat surface. Some of the shadows are unanchored or don't bend convincingly across the surface they fall upon (https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/9/shadows). Remember, the contour ellipse goes on the side of the ellipse which faces the viewer. If it turns away, the contour ellipse is contradictory.
Next Steps:
Lesson 3 is next.
Don't forget to add the exercises from Lesson 2 to your warmup pool.
Many thanks for your review ! I'll make sure to keep training those exercises while pursuing with the next lssons !
Some of you will have noticed that Drawabox doesn't teach shading at all. Rather, we focus on the understanding of the spatial relationships between the form we're drawing, which feeds into how one might go about applying shading. When it comes time to learn about shading though, you're going to want to learn it from Steven Zapata, hands down.
Take a look at his portfolio, and you'll immediately see why.
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