12:09 AM, Saturday September 18th 2021
Hi there, I'll be handling your box challenge critique.
Not only does the challenge help deepen your understanding of important concepts but it shows your desire to learn as well. Be proud of what you've accomplished and that desire you've shown. That being said I'll try to keep this critique fairly brief so you can get working on the next steps as soon as possible.
Things you did well:
Your line work improves quite a bit, there's still work to do but your lines are looking more confident and smoothly drawn then when you started.
You're keeping your hatching lines evenly spaced which helps prevent things from getting too messy.
It's nice to see that you're trying to implement line weight. Most people find that they need to build up a bit of mileage before they find themselves comfortable applying it. Getting an early start on building up that mileage will help you see results sooner.
Good work experimenting with proportions and orientations. Experimentation is an important part of the learning process and will help you develop a more well rounded understanding. Keep it up and keep developing this habit.
Things you can work on:
Try pushing your hatching lines so that each end of the line touches an edge of the plane they're being drawn on.
While it's good that you're applying line weight, it does get quite messy at times. Remember that we want to keep it subtle, one additional line is often enough.
I'd like you to experiment with rates of foreshortening more. Try changing up the distance of your vanishing points to create more dramatic rates of foreshortening.
There are times when your lines converge in pairs or you attempt to keep your lines a bit too parallel which results in them diverging. This is an example of lines converging in pairs, and this shows the relation between each line in a set and their respective vanishing point. The inner pair of lines will be quite similar unless the box gets quite long and the outer pair can vary a lot depending on the location of the vanishing point. Move it further away and the lines become closer to parallel while moving it closer increases the rate of foreshortening.
The key things we want to remember from this exercise are that our lines should always converge as a set not in pairs, never diverge from the vanishing point and due to perspective they won't be completely parallel.
I won't be moving you on to the next lesson just yet, each lesson builds off concepts in the previous course material so if you move forward with un-addressed issues you end up just creating further issues on top of them.
I did also look at your other submissions to get a feeling if some of these issues were present in earlier work and noticed that you have completed and submitted lesson 2 already. As instructed here you're not meant to be moving on to the next section until you get the go ahead to do so, this prevents issues that should be addressed from being a problem in the next section of course material. An example of this being if your lines aren't confident in lesson 1 and you decide to move on to the box challenge, your lines may not be confident in the box challenge, then when the person critiquing your work needs to explain how and why it's important to draw confidently you may have already addressed the issue wasting both parties times especially if revisions are involved. I'm not sure if this is all old work that you're submitting now or if it was just a case of you working on lesson 2 and the box challenge at the same time and deciding that you wanted official critique. Your lesson 2 submission is very recent so I'm going to assume it's up to date work and won't be asking you to redo the entire lesson because I don't want to risk you facing burn out. If you are working on lesson 3 in your own time at the moment I'm going to ask you to stop and wait until your lesson 2 work and any revisions that are needed are critiqued. Use the time you're waiting between critiques to work on on the 50% rule mentioned in lesson 0 and refining some of the earlier concepts through your warm ups.
With that out of the way, I'd like you to draw 20 more boxes.
Try to work on your line confidence consistency.
Do your best to keep your line weight subtle and your hatching tidy.
Experiment with different rates of foreshortening.
Remember to take your time, it's quite common for boxes to take 10 minutes each to draw.
Once you've completed your boxes reply to this critique with a link to them, I'll address anything that needs to be worked on and once you've shown you're ready I'll move you on to the next lesson.
I know you can do this and look forward to seeing your work.
20 more boxes please.
11:38 PM, Sunday September 19th 2021
I did put the 250 box challenge up for critique, but I never got a critique and I didn't have a credit to submit it at the time. I guess I missed the part where that was mandatory (I got a bad habit of skimming through the reading sometimes.) I'll hold off on the lessons because even I felt like I was going through them too fast and absorbing too much at the same time. I think I responded better this time with the concepts I was lacking. If not don't hold back. Thank you for pointing out my other lessons, it reminded me that I still have to practice the techniques from the previous lessons to do better on the next lesson.
1:14 AM, Monday September 20th 2021
These are noticeably improved.
When applying line weight you still get some sketchy lines rather than a single confident line being added over top of the previous line but you're headed in the right direction for sure.
It's also good to see that you notice some of your bad habits, that's your first step to working on improving them.
I think you're ready to move on to lesson 2 or rather you may want to look through lesson 2 again and then reflect on your work to see if there was anything you feel you did incorrectly. If you think it looks ok and you just need to wait for your critique to point out what you need to work on then you can work on drawing for yourself and following the 50% rule.
Congratulations on completing the box challenge.
Move on to lesson 2.