Hi Chang, I'm Flippy, and I'll be doing your Lesson 1 critique today.

Let's get right into it.

Superimposed Lines

• The majority of your lines look very smooth and confident.

• There are some instances in the longest of your lines that you begin to arch a bit. This could be a case of you not using your whole arm, moving from your shoulder, when executing the stroke.  https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/2/pivots  Sometimes intentionally curving your lines in the opposite direction you are prone to curving in can help balance out the stroke.

• On a few of your lines it looks like you didn't start in the exact spot of the underlying stoke, causing fraying near the beginning. (Unless, of course, you rotated the page, and so started your lines on the right side and drew to the left.) Make sure you always give yourself time to properly align your strokes to the starting line.  https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/1585f266.jpg

• Your strokes are consistently hitting very close to their target. Well done.

Your lines are already looking good, and they'll only improve with time and milage.

Ghosted Lines

• Your strokes very confident

• You properly utilized the Ghosting method 

• Wobble is very minimal 

• Not much overshooting or undershooting present

Excellent work here!

And the same goes for the Ghosted Plains

The minor case of undershooting/overshooting will go away with time. All your lines were very well executed and very tidy.

Tables of Ellipses

• Ellipses appear drawn through 2x-3x times

• Some of your ellipses go outside of the borders, but this is a small issue, as the majority fit in nicely

• Some of your "hyper extended" ellipses are a little messy near the furthest points, but the rest look very clean, and could be divided into two equal halves at the minor axis

Ellipses in Plains

• Some of your ellipses fail to touch all four intended points, but more important than accuracy is confidence, the ability to draw an even ellipse without hesitation. As with lines, our accuracy with ellipses will improve as we go. Good work here.

Funnels

• Your funnels fit well into the confines of the curves while maintaining even placement along the minor axis

• Some of your funnel's show the shift in the degree of the ellipses better than others. I would suggest making the shift more dramatic, starting from only a sliver in the middle and working your way up to almost 90 degrees. (You already achieve this with some of your own, so just take this as a reminder.)

That's all I have to say concerning your ellipses. I think you did a great job with them.

Now, onto the boxes!

Plotted Perspective

• Boxes are drawn through

• Your hatching lines are nice and clean

• Boxes are well-placed with little distortion 

Good.

Rough Perspective

• Your boxes' angles came impressively close to their intended targets

• There are some instances where it appears you've redrawn lines. Please refrain from doing this, as it disincentivizes us to draw them to the best of our ability the first time if we allow ourselves to correct it after. (I still struggle with this rule myself.)

Rotated Boxes

Now, first let me say that this exercise is meant to be difficult, but you did a great job on it.

I think your angles might be a little extreme, because in Uncomfortable's demo, the larger form ends up shaped like a sphere, whereas yours is slightly more diamond-shaped, but what's more important is that you were consistent with your spacing all the way through. I can tell you were paying close attention to the relationships of the boxes, finding the parallels and using them to make educated guesses about the next box's rotation, which is the whole point of this exercise! Furthermore, you made very good use of hatching lines, keeping them clean and even, though there were a couple more surfaces that could have used them. (Don't worry about it)

And lastly, Organic Perspective

Looks good.

• Good job varying the boxes' size to portray depth

• The boxes' line convergences look believable

• In the third panel of the first page, the box in the middle looks a little unrelated to the rest of the drawing, as does the leftmost box on the third panel of the second page, since they are not on the depth line

• Good job overlapping the boxes

• really nice composition — especially that last one

• Kudos for using line weight on the overlaps

And I believe that brings us to the end.

I'm afraid I didn't find enough areas to correct you on. I think you did an amazing job with this first lesson, and I am confident that you are ready to move forward.