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5:50 PM, Monday June 28th 2021

Hello and congrats on completing lesson one. I'll be taking a look at your submission today. Starting with your superimposed lines these are off to a fine start. You are keeping a clearly defined starting point with all of your wavering at the opposite end. I'm noticing that you are getting a bit of wobble in your ghosted lines and planes. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/wobbling This is also quite present in some of the later exercises although I am seeing improvement with your final exercise but I still want to mention this advice here so you can understand what the problem likely is.

This is the important part we need to be focusing on and the real problem I'm seeing:

You're hesitating as you execute the line, rather than drawing with a confident motion. Finally committing to a mark can definitely be quite daunting, but it's integral that you get used to accepting that mistakes do happen. Things go wrong - you can prepare as much as possible (and you should) but the moment your pen touches the page, any opportunity to avoid a mistake has already passed. Now you must commit yourself, push through with confidence, and execute your line. It's also worth remembering: we can still work with a line that is smooth and even, but there's not much that can be done with a wobbly one.

What's most likely happening is that you are worrying about accuracy too much while making your mark and it's causing you to slow down your stroke to compensate which is giving you quite a bit of wobble in your lines. The other possibility is that you aren't ghosting your lines or you are reverting back to drawing from your wrist on occasion. I can't be entirely sure of which specific thing is happening and it even could be combinations of all of them.

Your ellipses are largely suffering from the exact same issue which really just goes to show that once you fix this problem it will improve every aspect of your drawing and that improvement is very evident with your organic perspective boxes and the line confidence I see there. Your tables of ellipses is coming along okay. You are doing a good job drawing through your ellipses and while you seem to be focused on consistent ellipse shape you are getting quite a bit of line wobble trying to be accurate. This is carried over into your ellipses in planes and you are still deforming your ellipses at times. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/12/deformed This is likely happening because you are too worried about accuracy and are probably slowing down your stroke to compensate. Try and rely a bit more on the muscle memory of the motion you build up while ghosting and almost make your mark without thinking. This will be less accurate at first. Although accuracy is our end goal it can't really be forced and tends to come through mileage and consistent practice more than anything. Your ellipses in funnels are having the same wobbly line issues but otherwise seem alright. Your ellipses definitely need smoother linework before moving on so I'd like you to do one more page of the table of ellipses. I want you to focus on trying to get smooth linework and don't worry about accuracy too much. Ghost your ellipses multiple times and then try and rely on the muscle memory of that motion you build up.

The plotted perspective looks great, nothing to mention here. Your rough perspective exercises turned out pretty good. There is a decent improvement here in terms of line confidence although I am still seeing wobble in some of your lines. Once again this is probably happening because you are more concerned with accuracy now that you are constructing boxes and you are slowing down your stroke to compensate. You are doing a good job extending the lines back on your boxes to check your work. As you can see some of your perspective estimations were quite off but that will become more intuitive with practice.

Your rotated box exercise turned out pretty well. I like that you drew this nice and big as that really helps when dealing with complex spatial problems. You also did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps narrow and consistent. You're not quite nailing the rotations for this exercise but this was a good effort overall. Nice work. This is a great exercise to come back to after a few lessons to see how much your spatial thinking ability has improved. Your organic perspective exercises are where I'm seeing the biggest improvement in terms of line confidence. You seem to be getting more comfortable using the ghosting method and drawing from your shoulder for confident linework which is great although I am still seeing the occasional wobbly line. Some of your box constructions are decent but there are quite a few wonky ones so the 250 box challenge will be a great next step for you.

Overall this was a good submission that showed a good deal of growth when it comes to line confidence and quality. I think you still need to get there with your ellipses but the organic perspective exercise was showing very good improvements. Keep up with using the ghosting method and drawing from your shoulder. I'd like you to do one more page of the table of ellipses with a focus on smooth linework. Once you get that submitted I'll take a look and you can most likely move on to the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

One page Table of Ellipses - Focus on Smooth Linework

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10:03 PM, Monday June 28th 2021

Thank you for the critique! I was struggling with the ellipses but while working on the revision, it did feel better, hopefully that reflects (the accuracy is pretty off, so of course, let me know if I need to do it again. In the mean time I'll practice it on my own.) Thank you! Here is my revision of the Table of Ellipses

1:35 AM, Tuesday June 29th 2021

These are definitely starting to look better. Keep up with practicing ellipses during your warmups. I'm going to mark this as complete and you can move on to the 250 box challenge. Good luck!

Next Steps:

The 250 Box Challenge

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