Congratulations on completing lesson 2!
Arrows
Good job on your line work; the lines look confident and smooth. However, some of the shading is a little confusing. For example, in this image https://imgur.com/a/dobVG9f you shaded both sides of the arrow where it overlaps. Make sure you only shade the inside portion to clarify which part of the arrow is on top. Here's how it might look: https://imgur.com/a/7qa0jwG.
Organic Forms
A couple of your sausages have inconsistent widths. This will get easier as you gain more control of your lines in your warm-ups. Your contour curves wrap around the sausages well. However, for the contour ellipses, make sure you are varying the degree of the ellipses to show how the form is turning in space. Here is a good diagram from lesson 2 showing what I mean: https://imgur.com/a/e7tXzTy.
Texture Analysis/Textured Organic Forms
The shadow shapes in your crumpled paper texture are done well. However, for your dirt texture, try not to outline the individual pebbles. Although I am not 100% sure since I haven't seen the original reference, it does look like you outlined the pebbles rather then build them up through the surrounding cast shadow shapes. Also, with the dirt texture, the transition from dark to light is a little too sudden. The black bar should blend in more into the middle shadows. As for the textured organic forms, some of the textures like the strawberry on page 1 and the bricks on page 2 don't wrap around the form. Bricks are difficult to translate to a round form like a sausage. I think a good approach would be to make it look like one of those cylinder brick watch towers. For the strawberry texture, you can think of the seeds as ellipses. If you take a look at this photo https://imgur.com/a/yBe70Yd, you will see how the seeds that are facing towards the edges look squashed compared to the ones in the center. This is because they are turning away from the viewer. However, in your drawing, they are similar sizes, which makes the surface look flatter. Also try to draw only the shadows cast by the seeds and not the actual seeds themselves.
Form Intersections
Your forms look solid. Many of the intersections are actually just the overlaps but you will have more time to practice these later on in the course.
Organic Intersections
Good job on the sausage forms; they fit together convincingly. One critique I have is about the shadow shapes. Try to exaggerate the curve of your shadows so they look like they wrap around the form of the sausages below them. I had the same issue when I submitted my lesson 2 homework. Take a look at this drawing: https://imgur.com/a/qeYt5xv. Also, the bottom sausages should have a full cast shadow under them.
Next Steps:
Moving forward I would recommend redoing 1 page of arrows with the shadows in mind, 1 page of organic forms with ellipses, and a textured sausage (don't have to do whole page). Let me know if you have any questions.
Hello, and thanks for reviewing my submission! I've took your advice with textures by drawing only cast shadow shapes but I still struggle with it. I've also included the references I've used.
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/18J-04Xvj1ic5cLWwEAP9OZC7jj3gGQBA
Hello!! The shadows on all the arrows look to be in the right locations so good job! I can also see that you worked on making the ellipses change in degree for the organic forms. One thing to work on going forward is making sure your ellipses touch the boundaries of the sausage. For example, the ellipses in the bottom left sausage are kind of floating in the middle.
Don't worry about the textures too much since that exercise is designed to be difficult. It looks like you drew the cast shadows for the elephant skin and I like how some of the skin bumps break the silhouette. The old tree texture does flatten out the sausage a bit, and I think this is because the shadow lines run straight across the form instead of curving along the sausage. This is not the same type of bark but here https://imgur.com/a/Xf8MZgv you can see how the shadows created by the cracks are more warped rather than straight. However, overall it looks like you understood the concepts and are ready to move on to the next lesson!
Next Steps:
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