Hello Weijak,

I wanted to give you a detailed critique because I saw you have contributed critiques to many others. Nice job.

2 pages of Organic forms - Many of your contour curves are hooking around the sausage beautifully. Good job trying out a wide variety of sausage forms. Some of your contour curves overshoot the sausage boundaries, but you will get better in time. Overall your sausages are looking good and you tackled the ways of the organic form better than I did on my first attempt.

Insects overall - I like your work here. You took care to draw your insects large. That is something that I did not do the first time and it was detrimental to myself. I am not a professional YET, but I noticed that many of your insects have the same perspective. This is not an issue in your work, but in future lessons trying an array of perspectives can help solidify 3D form knowledge. Honestly, you did well. Your insects all feel like I can reach out and touch them. Not that I would if given the opportunity...

Insect beetle - The 3D forms are solid. You did a good job with the additive construction of the beetle's shell. One important issue is that you left out the hooks/graspers of your insect's feet. I am not sure if you would call them feet. For example, a beetle may have: https://images.app.goo.gl/NmLKi9toVPwLF1SGA and you would integrate these sharp hooks/graspers into your insect/arachnid. The drop shadow and cast shadow look beautiful. The sausages of your beetle are also looking good. One big thing you missed was how the legs connect. Note how the sausage connection areas of the legs are not integrated. For example, imagine a person. They have muscles around their joins that connect the thigh to the body. Every joint on a person has this connection. I also made this mistake on my first attempt To be honest, I was not aware of this until Mr. Irshad brought it to my attention. To get a better idea see this image: https://images.app.goo.gl/4tPpn2hXfQx9ViVq8 and see these examples Mr. Irashad gave me: https://i.imgur.com/8O2RTcT.png ,https://i.imgur.com/t6oz7Tv.png , https://i.imgur.com/7b9rc9e.png ,

https://i.imgur.com/97hS0XF.png

Grasshopper and Ant - They seem to suffer from the joint connection issue I mentioned earlier. I may be mistaken based on your reference material. I know not all insects have this type of connection. Also, some of your lines appear to be a bit wobbly. You are drawing big, but if possible you may want to draw larger. I still suffer from achieving this. I am only saying this to help you.

Beetle #2 - You darkened the beetle's eyes. This is generally not recommended. We are more concerned here with representing 3D forms in 3D space. I am going to ignore this issue because your other work does not have this issue.

Spider - It appears many of your sausages are wobbly. This is probably because you were drawing small. Overall the main 3D forms are looking good. Perhaps in your reference, you did not see the hook/graspers at the end of the spider's feet. I am not going to take that into account. You did a good job of observing your reference and trying to represent the 3D forms in 3D space.

Fly - It is looking really good overall. I don't want to sound like a broken record, but recall the same sausage connection issue I mentioned before.

Hornet - At this point, I realized for many of your antennas you used a cylinder than a sausage shape. Do what works best for you, but you may want to give the "branching" method a try. Overall your antennas look good. Use what best works for you. That advice I am giving may just be stupid and I should probably just shut up. Honestly, I am going to try your method the next time I practice insects.

Rhino beetle - Good overall, but did you include every construction of the rhino beetles shell head? Or did this beetle lose a battle? Not an insult to your work. I know many insects have disfigurements due to fights. I just want to make sure that you meant this insect was fully finished.

Scorpion - I really like it. You used the box method for the construction of the body correctly. You also represented the claws really well. Some of your sausages are a bit wobbly. Please recall the sausage connection issue I mentioned multiple times.

Ladybug - Construction is good. At this point, you may have realized that I did not really talk about "detail". While I try my best to give a critique, the detail is not my expertise. Overall, I thought your use of detail followed drawabox detail technique correctly. Although I am not sure about the ladybug's spots. You may want to get a critique of your detail from another critiquer.

In conclusion, you tackled lesson 4 with grace. I think your largest issue was the sausage connection issue. You followed all of the instructions correctly and I am impressed. For your benefit, I only want one thing. I want you to do one page of any insect (or arachnid) of your choice and please make sure you use the sausage connection technique I mentioned above. This page does not have to have any included detail or cast/drop shadows. Just construction. You are so freaking close to being ready for lesson 5! It is just that lesson 5 requires this sausage connection technique that I mentioned. This will only help you. I hope it does not annoy you! I made the same mistake. But I made many more mistakes than you did when I did the lesson 4 exercises.

Hope this helps,

Lars Barnabee