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7:57 PM, Saturday March 8th 2025
Organic Arrows: Arrows are good, you didn't hesitate in overlapping the upper and lower lines.
Texture Analysis: There is a lack of "lost and found" edges (described here), which has the effect of making the elephant skin texture look particularly cluttered.
Dissections: You are drawing contours, not shadows, which makes the textures look cluttered. Example: instead of drawing every single individual rock in gravel, you should just draw the gaps between the rocks, which are shadows due to their being darker than their surrounding.
You can only draw contours for the texture's silhouette, so if you are doing a corn texture, you can draw the little dips from the grains that appear at the edges, but you can't outline every grain.
Contour lines:
Contour ellipses: Ellipses' degrees increase as they get farther to the viewer, their alignment is correct as well.
The ellipses at the tips are too small, that'd be justified if they were nearer the form's tip, but they aren't.
Try imagining them like a ring you drew around the tip of a sausage with a marker, meaning that they should run along it's surface and be centered on the minor axis. The way you draw them, they seem to be either A: aligned to the axis but not touching the form's surface, becoming an small ring that somehow manage to enter the sausage or B: touching the form's surface but not having the axis as it's center, becoming essentialy a sticker.
Contour Curves: Curves do seem to run along the form's surface.
The tip contours in this section have the same issues as the in previous one, with the addition of the fact that you drew elipses on areas where they shouldn't be fully visible, or even visible at all.
The contours on the tip are like the exposed, circular pulp that shows up just after you remove a banana from its bunch. Depending on how you position the fruit, they become either fully visible (when the pulp is directly facing you), partially visible (when the banana is sideways, you can't see it's opposite side) or invisible (the banana's body completely obstructs the white part).
Organic intersections: Illusion of weight is broken by having some sausages floating in the air, either partially (it doesn't curve around the edge of the sausage it's on) or fully (it only touches sausages at its tips), which are unstable configurations.
Form intersections: Not much to complain about here, your intersections are better than mine.
Next Steps:
Redo the Contour Lines exercise, both parts, try to put my feedback into practice
1 page of organic intersections that take into account the stability of the sausages (i.e: don't draw them in a way that makes it seem like they are about to fall or sag even a little, we want to achieve the look of a pile of water balloons. Are water balloons hard enough to be able to remain straight without being supported all the way down or do they just curve around the shape below them?).
Check the video where Comfy goes through Dissections, not the whole thing, skip around it looking for some pieces of advice and try to mimic the way he does things.
1 page of Dissections that focus solely on shadows.
8:05 AM, Thursday March 13th 2025
Thank you so much for the critique and i have attached my redoes
8:30 PM, Friday March 14th 2025
I see you have improved on your spatial reasoning by drawing more accurate contour ellipses around sausages.
The organic intersections are way more believable now.
The textures are less cluttered than before, but textures like the top left one, that have outlines for every detail, show you haven't fully grasped the concept of "texture by shadow"yet.
Next Steps:
Now you should do Lesson 3.
11:04 PM, Friday March 14th 2025
TYSM!!!!
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5:12 AM, Friday March 14th 2025
Hello. After reviewing your reply with the redoes I have noticed some details:-
You contour lines and ellipses are much better but your ellipses in particular look like they have been drawn over more than 3 times, this makes them look cluttered
Your organic intersections have also improved a lot. The only thing I would recommend is maybe adding more sausages next time
Your dissections show a much clearer understanding of whats a shadow vs form. There are some forms that you have mixed up the shadow and form with but you have improved a lot from your past attempt
Next Steps:
Move to lesson 3. My recommendation is that you add organic forms to your warmup pool but leave them behind when you feel comfortable with them
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