Lesson 2: Contour Lines, Texture and Construction

2:49 AM, Tuesday September 27th 2022

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This Leason and course has been really fun so far, Thank you for the critique

On a page 2 and 4 of my Intersections i was working on a different surface than usual so there are a few holes in the page

Last page of Organic Intersections: https://imgur.com/a/3ov5Ncv

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9:58 PM, Wednesday September 28th 2022

I'll be the TA handling your Lesson 2 critique.

You're making progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson and hopefully this critique will help you in your future attempts.

  • Starting off in the arrows section your lines are looking smoothly and confidently drawn. There are spots where your arrows bulge/narrow suddenly, this is an issue because it gives the impression that your arrows are stretching which hurts their solidity. Remember that as our arrows move closer to the viewer we want them to widen consistently. It's good to see that you're trying to implement line weight, just remember that you want to keep your applications subtle and you'll become consistent with mileage. here are some things to look out for when applying it. At times you don't overlap your edges when you should, this results in your arrows flattening out as you can see here. I'd like you to experiment more with foreshortening in your future attempts, by utilizing it in both the arrows themselves as well as the negative space between their curves we can create a stronger illusion of an object moving through 3D space as demonstrated here.

  • Moving into the organic forms with contours exercise your forms are getting a bit too complex. We want to create our forms with both ends being the same size and to avoid any pinching, bloating, or stretching along the form's length as discussed here. You're keeping your line work confident here which is great, if you feel uncomfortable working with contours still don't stress with more mileage it'll become more natural. Speaking of contours I'd like you to try and shift the degree of your contours more. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.

  • In the texture exercises you're focusing largely on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. You also show that you're drawing from memory rather than giving yourself enough time to focus on your reference. Most of our time when doing exercises like this will be spent observing our reference and looking away for a quick second to add something to our page. For more on the importance of focusing on cast shadows read here. I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.

  • It's quite common for people to feel like they don't fully grasp the form intersections exercise, if you feel like you may fall into this category try not to stress too much. This exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page. We'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons. That being said you don't actually attempt to draw the intersections very often which you were instructed to do. In particular it appears like you choose not to draw intersections when boxes intersect with non-round forms, while we don't expect you to do well in this exercise we do want to make sure you put in your best attempt.

  • While wrapping up your submission with the organic intersections exercise you show that you need a bit more time becoming comfortable with thinking of how these forms interact in 3D space and how they'd wrap around one another. Currently it appears more like you're drawing forms over one another rather than taking the time needed to wrap them around each other. Addressing the issues brought up in the previous organic form section will help you here as well. Your shadows are hugging the form creating them rather than being cast on to another surface believably. It appears like your shadows aren't following a consistent light source, I recommend pushing your light source to the top left or right corner of the page to start with, it's easier than working with a light directly above your form pile.

I won't be moving you on to the next lesson just yet, each lesson builds upon each other and I'd like to make sure you understand a few of these concepts a bit more before potentially creating more problems down the road.

With that being said I'd like you to please re-read and complete:

  • 1 page of the organic forms with contours exercise (half of the forms with ellipses, the other half with contour curves)

  • 2 pages of the form intersections exercise (the first page should be all boxes, the second can be a mix of forms but try to draw intersections for every form)

Something notable in your submission as well is that your lines are quite thick, if you don't mind we'd be curious if you could take a picture of your pen with the cap off so we can what brand, size and type you're using.

If you have any questions before getting started feel free to ask them.

Once you've completed the pages mentioned above reply to this critique with a link to them, I'll go over them and address anything that needs to be worked on and once you've shown you're ready for the next lesson I'll move you on.

I look forward to seeing your work.

Next Steps:

  • 1 page of organic forms with contours

  • 2 pages of form intersections

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
3:49 AM, Thursday September 29th 2022

Thanks again for the critique here are my revisions and the pen I'm using. https://imgur.com/a/QsrUhrF

Do you have any tips for the Intersections? It was really difficult for me to figure out where they intersect

6:48 PM, Friday September 30th 2022

Tofu will be looking at your revisions, but I wanted to quickly address your question about the intersections. It's entirely normal for students at this stage to figure out how they intersect, and it is entirely normal for those intersections to be incorrect. At this stage in the course are merely asking students to give it their best shot, even if it's entirely wrong. This effectively plants a seed in the student's mind, which then - as they work through Lessons 3-5 - gradually develops as you're forced to work through the combination of different forms in 3D space (albeit in much simpler circumstances). Then we assign the exercise again in Lesson 6, at which point we talk about it a little more, since the student's in a better position to actually understand any suggestions or adjustments we may have to offer.

7:01 PM, Friday September 30th 2022

Thank you for the explanation It was kinda nerve wracking but a fun exercise lol

8:42 PM, Friday September 30th 2022

No problem.

Overall these are are definitely and improvement over your original attempts. Your organic forms still have room to keep improving but I have no doubt as you continue to practice that you'll better results.

It's good to see that you tried to draw more intersections as well, since Uncomfortable already mentioned that we aren't expecting you to be great at them just yet I won't stress that too much.

Your pen does seem to be one we're very familiar with which makes your line thickness a bit surprising, it may be that you're applying a fair bit of pressure while drawing. If that's the case try to lighten the pressure just a bit, it'll cause less strain on your arm and make your pens last longer.

Other than that, I have no problem moving you on to the next lesson now so I'll be marking your submission complete.

Best of luck in lesson 3.

Next Steps:

Move on to lesson 3.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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