7:00 PM, Thursday June 23rd 2022
Hello I'll be handling the critique for your lesson 5 homework
Organic Intersections
-Starting with the organic intersections, your forms are beginning to wrap around each other believably, but there are a few things to keep in mind. First of all avoid using the technique where you draw a big sausage and then add a bunch of smaller ones on top of it, instead try to keep them equally sized, and avoid any complexity like pinching or swelling throughout their length. Keeping them simple and easy to work with is the best strategy to produce good results.
There are many sausages which do not have cast shadows, and on the ones that do have cast shadows you are not pushing them far enough. Remember that they act as contour lines, and help to describe how these forms exist in 3D space, so try to push them further and give them a nice curve, as shown here.
Animals
-Moving on to the animal constructions, I see a good employment of the construction method, as you have broken each one of your subjects into its more primitive and simple elements, but let's see which things can be worked on and improved. I'll try to break this critique into each individual aspect of the constructions.
Additional Masses
Your use of the additional masses is good and you are making some good attempts at wrapping the silhouette of each mass around the form they are falling on. However I can see that many of them have sharp corners and turns, the problem with this is that sharp corners and turns are a characteristic of geometric forms not of organics, it is better to rely on simple and continuous curves as shown in this diagram.
The only cast where you can use sharp corners is whenever one additional mass comes in contact with another form, usually the shoulder masses, this is better shown here is one example, take a look at how the masses on the shoulder have sharp corners as a result of coming in contact with other existing forms.
Leg Construction
-You have used the sausage method correctly in a way that captures both the flow and solidity of these limbs. The main critique I want to offer here is that you seem to be focusing only on the forms that directly impact the silhouette, instead try to start thinking about the forms that do not directly impact it, try to think more about the internal masses that do not directly impact the silhouette, these are like the missing pieces of a puzzle that help to hold together the forms that sit on the silhouette, you can see a more concrete example here. This last point applies to additional masses in general not only to the legs.
Another thing that is worth pointing out is how to construct feet, I like to see that on some of your animals you are drawing the feet with sharp corners, as opposed to the additional masses you can draw the feet with boxy forms to define the different existing planes. Once that is in place you can start to capture the toes and such with more boxy forms, here is an example for you to see
Oh and I want to make one suggestion, try to actually construct the back legs instead of just drawing the silhouette and flattening them out. It doesn't really help you learn anything if you just draw them like silhouettes
Head Construction
Okay, to finish I want to talk about head construction. You are already moving in the right direction , just make sure that you draw the eye sockets big and the eyeballs should be big too. The shape of the eye sockets is better off as a pentagon pointing downwards this will give you a wedge to fit the muzzle into and a flat top for the forehead and brow ridge, then you can start to draw the facial features following the already planes of the muzzle, you can take a look at this process here .
The trick is to try to make a lot of smaller steps and moves rather than trying to capture a lot of things at once.
Okaaaaay, I think I have given you plenty of things to work on and I do want to see them addressed, so I'll give you some revisions. Good luck!!!
Next Steps:
Please do the following
-2 pages of organic intersections
-2 animal constructions of your own choice