For some additional information I already did the 250 box challenge but since my phone is broken I wasn't able to take pictures for it, and I can't take then with someone else phone since it's alot of pages, I will post it whenever I get a new phone. I hope it's not a problem!
hello, i'll be critiquing your submission
arrows
X - some of the lines on the arrow heads look rushed, you should always ghost every line and execute with confidence
X - there doesn't seem to be any line weight added to the part of the arrow closer to the viewer, making it slightly confusing to figure out which part is behind and which is in front in some arrows
correct - all of the arrows compress and get smaller as they move farther back
organic forms
X - the degree of the ellipses/contours remains mostly the same (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/6822fd02.jpg,
X - the contour curves are very shallow, they aren't hooking around on most sausages (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg)
X - the contour curves are misaligned to the minor axis (the flow line) (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/4d7871e1.jpg) (although the ellipses seem to be fairly aligned)
correct - most of the ellipses touch the edges of the sausage
texture analysis
correct - drawing in cast shadows and not lines
correct - gradient is smooth
correct - no hatching or dotted lines
dissections
X - some textures appear really scribbly (especially the hairy one on the second page)
X - some textures have outlined forms instead of shadow shapes (especially the crocodile one on the first page)
correct - not afraid to break the silhouette
form intersections
organic intersections
X - same as in the contour curves exercise, most curves aren't hooking around (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg)
X - some of the cast shadows are small, they also dont follow the surface that the shadow is cast onto (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/516f8d4f.jpg)
(i saved the critique and cant edit the revisions, i forgot to add, you should also focus on keeping the curves aligned to the minor axis of the organic forms and also make sure to vary the degree of the curve)
Next Steps:
1 page of organic contour curves (only the curves and not ellipses, those are fine) this time focus on hooking the curve around the form
1 page of form intersections, this time focus on less, but bigger shapes, 10-12 forms should be fine, with shallower, less dramatic foreshortening/perspective and all forms should be close to equilateral
thank you for your critique, I did the organic contour twice
the form intersections are better now and less confusing, although i do want to point out that your hatching lines should have the same amount of effort put in as all other lines (planned, ghosted and executed with confidence) they look rushed, something to look out for as you move on
as for the organic contours, i only assigned 1 page of them, and you should only do the amount of work that is assigned because you cant be sure if you're doing them right, they are slightly better, but most of them aren't really hooking around the back (you should overshoot them as if they were to go slightly behind the form if that makes sense) (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg) and be sure to align the angle of the curve to the minor axis! (the flow line) (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/4d7871e1.jpg) this is something you can practice in your warm-ups (as you'll be adding all of these exercises to your warm-up selection)
Next Steps:
you can try the contour curves again (with hooking/overshooting and making sure to align them to the minor axis) and send them here if you want and i'll look over them
add all of these exercises to your warm-up selection
lesson 3
thank you for the critique, I will directly pass on lesson 3 but I will work on my organic forms in my warmup. thank you!
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