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3:53 PM, Monday July 11th 2022

Unfortunately there is a pretty significant issue that is present in the vast majority of your leaves here - specifically the more complex leaf structures which feature multiple "arms". You are skipping important constructional steps, in that you're not drawing each individual arm as a complete leaf shape as explained here in the lesson notes. You can also see this kind of thing in this demonstration from the informal demos page, which shows how we can build up to a maple-leaf type of leaf, building up complexity in successive stages, only ever adding that which can be supported by what's already present in the structure, and adding intermediary steps where they're needed.

Additionally, while your branches are definitely much improved over your last round, and you are extending each edge segment fully halfway to the next ellipse, I am noticing a tendency not to start your next segment at the previous ellipse, often starting it further along which minimizes the overlap. We can see an example of this here where the overlap is quite limited.

I'm going to ask for some further revisions below. I feel that if you can correct your approach with the more complex leaves, you should be good to go.

Next Steps:

Please submit:

  • 1 page of leaves, focusing completely on the complex leaf structures

  • 2 pages of plant constructions

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
1:07 AM, Monday July 18th 2022

https://photos.app.goo.gl/7cwriBDH3LGrX8ny6

Will continue working on separate leaf structures to build up more complex ones. Starting to get the flow of doing the steps in order.

Some of the pages here show some scratch work but spent time mainly on more complex leaves, no details added. hope i didn't bend the guidelines too much, eg with the squash plant it's like one berry y round leaf that is very wavy and rounded, almost feels like multiple leaf arms but not quite

6:32 PM, Monday July 18th 2022

In terms of how you're approaching the complex leaf structures this time around, your work is considerably better. You're building out each arm in its entirety, and then building off those structures to merge them together. There are a few minor points I want to draw your attention to however:

I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete, just be sure to keep these points in mind as you continue forwards.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 4.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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