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5:25 PM, Saturday May 7th 2022

Hello I'll be handling the critique for your lesson 1 homework.

Lines

-Starting with the superimposed lines, you have always started at a clearly defined point and kept all of the wavering on one side, which is correct. While we have the expected fraying at the ends this tends to disappear with more practice and mileage.

-Moving on to the ghosted lines, these are drawn with a good deal of confidence even if they are going to miss the ending point, which is good.

I do see that your lines tend to arc, so you may want to use the approach highlighted in this section of the ghosted lines exercise. The more you practice the better you will get and eventually you will not have to use this approach for your lines, but this takes time, so be patient.

-The ghosted planes are no different from the ghosted lines, and aside from the issues already mentioned, you are doing a pretty good job committing to your lines.

Ellipses

-The tables of ellipses are looking tidy rather than rushed, I can see that you have kept the angle, degree and spacing of this in mind. They are also drawn with a good deal of confidence and they are well rounded. The only bit of advice I want to give is that you should keep experimenting with the degrees of the ellipses.

-The ellipses in planes are turning out nicely, and it is great to see that you are not too overly concerned with having your ellipse touch the four sides of the plane, although I do notice some cases where they got pretty distorted.

Keep in mind that ellipses have to be symmetrical and have the same shape regardless of where they are, so the only things you can change is how wide the ellipse is, which position it is in and their size.

-On the funnels I like to see that your ellipses are still drawn confidently, but there are some issues to point out. You are doing a pretty good job at having your ellipses aligned to the minor axis, although there are some cases where they are clearly tilting off, this leads to your ellipses not being cut into equal halves by the axis. These issues will diminish with more mileage, I just want you to be aware of this the next time you try this exercise.

Boxes

-Your linework in the rough perspective is confident and accurate, which has definitely helped your boxes look more solid and believable, you are also doing some good attempts at aligning the sides of your boxes to the horizon line, lastly your estimations to the vanishing point are good and they will get better with practice.

-The rotated boxes are well done as you have kept the gaps between boxes narrow and consistent, you are clearly thinking about the rotation. I notice that you tried to use lineweight, it is important to keep in mind that we should be very subtle with it, so only add one superimposed line instead of drawing many haphazard marks. You may want to take a look at this diagram which shows how to correctly apply lineweight.

-Finishing with the organic perspective, I can see that you already have a good grasp of how to rotate a box in a 3 point perspective, this knowledge will certainly help you during the box challenge. The only bit of critique I want to offer is that you should apply lineweight on the specific parts where boxes overlap, lineweight is a useful tool to use here as we have a lot of boxes clumped together creating visual noise.

Okayy, you have done a good job on this lesson. I'll just go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.

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2:06 PM, Sunday May 8th 2022

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