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4:15 PM, Friday January 20th 2023

Hi Allieh!

Here are some things I saw:

Superimposed lines - These look good! You mostly start at the same point. It looks like on some of your longer lines, your starting point drifted to the right as you drew (or perhaps to the left, I don't know where you started ^^). And on some you arc your lines a bit to avoid those frayed ends. A confident straight line and frayed ends are better than trying to accurately match the start and end points.

Ghosted lines - A few wobbles in some of your lines or some slight curving to meet the end point, so try to draw more confidently even if you miss the dot. But overall really great job, especially with those longer lines!

Ghosted planes - You didn't need to do an extra set of these. ^^ I wonder if you did these first, then redid them for the ellipses in planes, or the other way around? Good overall. Make sure when you put in your points that you are at least starting there. You have some cross lines that don't meet either corner point. Take your time to plan your line. The planes with the ellipses seem a bit wonkier. I don't know if maybe you rushed through these more? There are also more wobbles and curves in some of the sides.

Table of ellipses - These are great! For the assignment, when you have those odd curved spaces, try to fill them with the same type of ellipse first (more elongated or more circular, with similar angle and degree), then fill in the gaps. But the ellipses themselves are well done.

Ellipses in planes - These are also well done (you're good at drawing ellipses!). Just a few with some common issues - not touching all sides, going outside the plane, not quite even. It's good to draw through, but on some of them, it looks like you've drawn through some of them many times. Try to stick with just twice.

Funnels - Again, good ellipses. It's difficult to tell on some of these, though, what your original ellipse looked like. You've drawn through them many times, so they touch because the lines are thick and maybe not because you planned well and drew them accurately. It's much better to draw them through just twice and have the gaps so you can see any weaknesses, instead of drawing around them multiple times to get them correct and make them look good.

Plotted perspective - Looks good. Nothing much to say here. ^^

Rough perspective - The first thing that jumped out at me was the redrawn and extended/overdrawn lines. Try not to redraw lines. It's hard when you notice right away that it wobbles or is going in the wrong direction, or when you're not sure where it should stop, so you extend it out too far. I did that too! But it's better to just notice the mistake, own it, and try to learn from it next time. Also, making sure you take the time when plotting out points and using the ghosting method so you know where everything is going before you drawn the lines should help with some of that.

Rotated boxes - Impressive! ^^ There's some wobble in your lines and your boxes aren't completely straight, and the right side is a bit more squished than the left, but overall very well done!

Organic perspective - Good! Your big boxes are pretty good. Some perspective issues with the far side begin larger than the near side. I struggled with that as well. And again you have some redrawing and correcting of lines. The overlap and space use for your big boxes was good, but then your little boxes thin out and sometimes you don't draw the "swoopy" line through the whole space. You don't have to cram everything in, but take advantage of the entire white space to practice.

Hopefully that was helpful! A lot of these things are mistakes I made, so I'm pointing them out as much for myself as for you! I think overall, make sure you're taking your time to plot your points and ghost and plan before you draw a line. And remember, confidence over accuracy!

Part of me wants to request revisions for that rough perspective, just to do a page where you don't draw over or extend your lines, but... you're also going to draw 250 more boxes. So just make sure you keep that in mind when you're doing that 250 box challenge. ^^

Next Steps:

Great job and congrats on finishing Lesson 1! I'm trying to go back to older submissions that don't have feedback, so if you haven't already, move on to the 250 box challenge. Even if you have, it wouldn't hurt you to do another page of rough perspective, but overall, just make sure you are drawing your lines with confidence and taking the time to plot everything out and ghost before actually drawing your boxes. Good luck and have fun!

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4:34 PM, Friday June 23rd 2023

Sorry for the late reply and thank you so much for this detailed critique, i really appreciate it!

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