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6:03 PM, Thursday March 25th 2021

Here's a bunch of notes written directly on your work. Overall I'm seeing signs that you're trying to address a number of the issues I raised, but they're not always the most consistent. Your biggest focus here was definitely on the use of those additional masses, and I can see that their shapes are much more intentionally designed now. When it comes to head construction, use of the sausage method (you should be using it for the legs on the opposite side of the body as well, instead of trying to just roughly draw their outlines) you're definitely sloppier than you should be. Also, there are places where you still attempt to alter the silhouettes of the forms you've drawn, instead of working in a strictly additive fashion, introducing new 3D forms ot your constructions.

Next Steps:

Let's do another 2 pages of animal constructions, but instead of doing 2 per page, stick to 1 per page and use the whole page to give yourself more room for each drawing. Also, take more time with things like paws/hooves - you do it better in some cases, but there are definitely others where you're still leaving things quite unfinished.

There's no speed or time limit expected here - if needed, you can spend multiple days on a drawing. You don't have to get everything done in a set period, so there's no reason for some areas of your drawings to be less finished than others.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
12:11 AM, Wednesday April 14th 2021

https://imgur.com/a/UkJCb3o

Took my time drawing and used a whole page as you suggested. Still getting the hang of drawing heads though and wrapping additional forms. I was also more mindful of not altering my silhouettes. But as always, your feedback is appreciated!

5:45 PM, Thursday April 15th 2021

This is looking much better! I can see you employing all the points I raised. I have just one minor suggestion for you to keep in mind - when drawing hooves/feet, the corners of the silhouettes of those forms are important. Right now you're drawing them with a lot of rounded, smooth curves. Corners in a silhouette help imply distinguished, separated faces/planes, which in turn helps make that form feel more three dimensional. Conversely, sticking with a smooth curve all the way through tends to make it feel more like a flat shape. When looking at your reference image, try to identify where you would separate the front from the side and the top, and draw your form's silhouette accordingly.

Anyway, good work all around. I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Feel free to move onto the 250 cylinder challenge, which is a prerequisite for lesson 6.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
9:06 AM, Thursday April 22nd 2021

Awesome! It took longer than I thought it would but completing this lesson was well worth it. Hooves are definitely giving me a bit of a harder time but your explanation is clearing it up. Thanks again :)

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