6:49 PM, Sunday March 14th 2021
So while your overall constructions are coming along well, the two issues you pointed out are indeed the ones I'd have called out myself.
To start with the sausages, you are indeed not sticking to simple sausage forms throughout, specifically for the upper thighs of animals like your wolves. This is a conscious decision you're making, though your own phrasing makes it out to be a passive issue that is just happening. Don't think of it that way - you are in control of the forms you attempt to draw, and you very specifically did draw seg segments that were decidedly larger on one end than the other. Construct those as simple sausages, and then add bulk by introducing additional masses to that structure afterwards. Don't attempt to address many different problems all at once.
As to the additional masses, it seems the way you're constructing those forms is still ignoring the presence of any other masses on the structure. As shown here, you need to be mindful of the presence of things like the shoulder and hip masses, having your additional masses actually wrap around them instead of just overlapping them as though they're not present. Furthermore, try and stretch those additional masses further so they actually take opportunities to wrap around those other structures, in the cases that they're barely touching, or just a little ways away from one another. These are opportunities to emphasize the relationships between the forms you're adding and the structures that already exist.
It's common for students to pile on additional contour lines because they feel that their additional masses don't feel 3D enough, that they just look like flat shapes pasted on top of their constructions. Unfortunately, more contour lines don't solve the problems at hand. It's all in how the silhouette itself is drawn (as described before, when I presented this diagram explaining how the silhouette wraps around the existing structure).
Looking at your previous submission, there is definitely a lot of overall progress here - but there are specific choices you have to consciously make when building up these constructions. You're very close, but there is a little further to go.
Next Steps:
Please submit 2 more pages of animal constructions. Focus on correcting these two specific issues. Also, I want you to refrain from adding contour lines to your forms like this. You can (and should) continue to use the contour lines that define the intersection/relationship between different 3D forms, but don't add any that sit on the surface of a single form.
