Arrows
They are pretty good and flow pretty nicely. To improve them you could make the growth of the arrows (both the size of the arrow itself and the spaces between folds), to grow more exponentially.
Organic forms
You've a few bulging and others with one size of the form pinching. Remember that the forms should be simple, only 2 balls connected by a tube of consistent width.
You've also got a few problems with the allginment of the ellipse. Remember they should all be alligned to the axis. Corrected a few of the allignments and forms so it was a bit more clear.
There's also the problem that you aren't shifting the degrees of the ellipses, they should shift, even if the sausage was straight, as you can see in this picture, try to be more conscious about it.
Otherwise, lines are confident and pretty accurate, good job!
Textures
On your textures you're doing a pretty good job, you're relying on shadows to draw them, and the gradations from black and towards white are smooth. Dissections wrap nicely around the forms and you are using use of the silhouette to help convey the texture better. There are a few were they could wrap a bit better around the form, but nothing specially wrong.
Form intersections
On your form intersections, you're doing a good job doing confident linework, though I think you might have rushed some of the lines, as they overshoot quite a bit. Remember to always draw starting and ending dots before drawing any line, and to ghost the lines until you're confident.
In all the forms and specially in the boxes, try to mantain a consistent shallow foreshortening instead of a more extreme perspective (which you did specially in the first page).
Be sure you don't repeat any line as well (I saw you repeated a few), even if they're wrong.
Organic intersections
Your organic intersection feel pretty solid in general, but there's a problem, and it's that you aren't drawing through your forms. If you take a look at the demo, you'll see how uncomfortable starts by drawing the sausages completely and separetely, and after it defining the relationships between them.
Next Steps:
I think you're making solid progress overall, but I want to see 2 more pages of organic forms, one with the contour curves, and other with contour ellipses, just like in the original homework. Be sure you think about how ellipses shift in those, and focus on mantaining the simple forms structure we should be aiming for. Good luck, and keep up the good work!
Thanks a lot for your great feedback ! That was very complete ! As asked, here is two more pages of organic forms (one with contour ellipses, one with contour curves) :
I hope it's good, but feel free to say if I have to redo them !
Thanks again !
Alright that's much better! You have a few wobbly lines, (so remember that confidence is always more important than accuracy), but you're now doing a good job keeping the forms to the shapes we're aiming form. And same goes with the contours. I can see you've repeated a line, probably it was subconscious, but just so I'm sure you remember it, never repeat a line, no matter how wrong it is.
Next Steps:
Alright, so you've done a good job so I'm going to mark this as complete, feel free to move to lesson 3!
Good, thanks for following up ! And the additional advice is noted (confidence over accuracy, never repeat a line).
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