Hi I'll critique your homework.
Starting with your arrows, they are looking pretty hesitant, ans seems that you are not drawing confidently, this undermines the fluidity of these, and as such I dont think you're getting as much as you can from doing this exercise. Here are some things to keep in mind when doing your arrows, this can be applied in the context of lineweight and also as part of your initial construction.
Moving to the organic forms with contours, I think that your forms are getting too complex, remember to avoid any elongated ends, and ends that are not spherical, as discussed here, regarding the contour lines, don't force yourself to put that many curves on any given sausage, only a few well placed contour curves/ellipses should be enough to reinforce the sense of 3D.
As a final note regarding this first two exercises, ou're repeating yourself with your forms quite a bit as well rather than experimenting.
We want you to be experimenting and not just repeating the same forms over and over or else you risk at improving only drawing those forms
Continuing on to the texture analysis, make your transition from sparse to light as subtle as possible, avoid any dramatic change of lighting, as this makes the creation of focal points more complicated. For more info on this subject make sure to read again this. I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.
You're focused on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows. Cast shadows are always the result of a specific form - when we focus more on drawing what we see rather than understanding the forms that cause it, we have a tendency to draw more arbitrary shapes or fill arbitrary spaces, focusing on our reference as something two dimensional rather than understanding what it represents in 3D space.
Moving on, I can see that you are clearly making an effort in the form intersections exercise,but you're just highlighting lines that come in contact with other forms. This is another tricky concept but one that we want to see a proper attempt at. Take a look here for more info.
And finally yor organic intersections, there's a big difference between the two pages of this exercise, the second one clearly shows that you can do things very well, nonetheless try to think of the forms as sausages on a plate in front of you, as they wrap around one another they'll be weighed down by gravity rather than just floating in space.
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Sorry if this critique came out a little rude, my intention is to help you improve.
I'm going to be asking you to redo the lesson with the exception that you don't need to redo texture, it's meant to be more of a challenge in this lesson rather than something we expect students to feel comfortable with just yet. I do want you to learn and do well in this course so I'd rather not risk burning you out by repeating the most difficult section of the lesson needlessly (do practice it on your own time in your warm ups however, this isn't an excuse to just neglect it).
Hi, no problem thanks for the answer, I want to improve so its appreciated.
Thank god I didnt have to redo the textures though, that is so time consuming :)
Yeah I was very confused when it came down to the shadows in the textures, because the examples didnt always seem like shadows to me, for example when it came down to fur. I will keep that in mind when doing the plant textures in lesson 3.
I have trouble with the sausages wrapping around, I am not fully satisified with them but I did a few iterations of the pages already, I also seem to have a habit of drawing them snakelike...
For the intersections, I do have trouble understanding them. I think a got a glimpse of the understanding when I read about them being contour lines on both forms, but it is still melting my brain quite a bit so they ar eprobably still quite off :P
Btw for the organic arrows, my pens were starting to be very low on ink, hence why the lines can be so faint sometimes.
Thanks a lot and let me know if I need to redo some things again.
Hi Nivom good to see you again. Yeah the textures is something that may feel a little disruptive to the flow of the course, so practice it but there's no harm in leaving it out for your next submissions.
So let's go through each step again
-Starting with the arrows you have definitely improved your linework and confidence, keep in mind that the negative space (space between the zigzagging sections of the ribbon) decreases as it moves further away, but I'm happy with your progress here. You said that you had problems with the pen's ink but I wanted you to look at this, lineweight is better used to mark where two objects overlap.
-In organic forms with contour lines you have put much more thought on the contour curves/ellipses, they only thing holding you back are the sausages, keep them simple without any over stretching, pinching and unequal size ends, you improved compared to the previous time, so it is very important that you keep practicing.
-Your work in the form intersection is coming along pretty nicely, so I'll suggest you take a look at this. You have kept everything consistent and it seems to belong to the same 3D space.
-Finishing with the organic intersections avoid the big mother technique in which you draw a big sausage and put many small ones on top. Overall there is improvement so good
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So you have definitely improved, I'll mark this lesson as complete but it is very important that you keep practicing these exercises.
As a sidenote could you help me by hitting the agree button in this critique.
Hi, thanks a lot and done :)
I will add the sausages to my warmups and keep practicing lineweight, I definitely see the difference when I apply it to my sketches etc for instance.
Thanks again for the critique and have a good day!
When it comes to technical drawing, there's no one better than Scott Robertson. I regularly use this book as a reference when eyeballing my perspective just won't cut it anymore. Need to figure out exactly how to rotate an object in 3D space? How to project a shape in perspective? Look no further.
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