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7:52 PM, Saturday April 11th 2020

Starting with your organic forms with contour curves, these are looking pretty well done. Your sausage forms are getting there, and while they're not perfect, it's clear that you're pushing them in the right direction.

For your forms wrapped around sausages, there are a few issues but also some of them came out quite well. Just avoid the sort of sharp corners that you ended up with in certain places. The masses we're wrapping around are thick but malleable like putty, or a fat water balloon. It's not like a sheet of metal, where it will retain a sharp corner.

You're definitely doing a much better job with your use of the sausage method (though I did notice that some of the sausages got a tiny bit shakier/wobblier in the tick. Focusing on the termite, there are two main issues to address:

  • First and foremost, you handled the segmentation along the abdomen incorrectly. You drew a bunch of individual contour lines. What you should be doing is thinking in terms of individual forms wrapping around the body. That's what the segmentation is - it's just plates of chitin that are overlapping one another.

  • Secondly - and we're only really able to touch upon this now because you're otherwise doing much better - your drawings are extremely simplistic. That is, you're focusing only on the most basic level of construction, and not breaking beyond it to capture any of the more nuanced form information that is present. When assigning the latest round of revisions, I mentioned:

I don't want you to get into detail/texture, be sure to take the drawings as far as you can when focusing on construction specifically

There is a wealth of information that can be captured through form and construction alone, and your drawings are only loosely capturing what is being conveyed in your reference images. You need to work on your observational skills to this point - to be able to identify the simple underlying masses as you've done here, and then to be able to see the further phases of construction that follow. As a whole, this means spending a lot more time studying your reference compared to how much time you spend drawing - to ensure that you're frequently looking back at your reference before transferring any bit of information, in order to better gauge how and where a given mark should be drawn, how large a form should be, etc.

So, to that end, I'm going to assign just one more drawing. I want a study of an insect similar to the tick and termite - something with a lot of segmentation, layered carapace, etc. Again, no texture or details, but really go as far as you can exploring the constructed forms, as I've shown in my redlining of your termite.

Next Steps:

One more drawing, as described above.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
5:33 AM, Sunday April 12th 2020

I tried capturing the actual silhouette more by adding extra forms to the basic balls and sausages, as you have said. Funny things happened with carapace, not sure if seperating the bottom and the top were the way to go and some ended up sharper as I was not used to doing this as much.

https://imgur.com/a/j8cey5d

5:50 AM, Sunday April 12th 2020

This is much more in line with what I'd like to see, as far as attention to nuance and the specifics of a construction go. I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete, so congrats - it took a bit, but you got through it, and have clearly developed a great deal.

Next Steps:

Feel free to move onto lesson 5.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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