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2:50 AM, Saturday October 30th 2021

https://imgur.com/a/ANsgXoU Hello, here are my revisions.

12:42 AM, Monday November 1st 2021

Looking over your revisions, there's one issue that continues to stand out. I spent the bulk of my previous critique calling out one central issue - the lack of foreshortening. This manifests in a few different ways:

  • Side edges not converging towards a shared vanishing point. In a few of these (number 50 for instance) yoou have the side edges converging, but they're operating completely independently of the other ellipse, resulting in it sticking way out the side rather than creating a single cohesive form.

  • The scale of the ellipse at each end remaining the same. You are shifting the degree correctly (making the farther end get wider relative to the end closer to the viewer) but their overall scale still remains the same.

While obviously you did take the time to read through my previous feedback, you have not correctly addressed the main issue I raised, and so I can only be left to assume that there was something you didn't understand.

In this diagram I've tried to illustrate the difference between what you've been doing (on the right side), and what you should be doing (on the left). If you have any other questions, or anything is at all unclear to you, do not hesitate to ask. If not, however, I'm going to go a bit light on the revisions and ask only for another 25. I'm really only interested in seeing you applying those convergences, and achieving the scale shift from one end to the other, so you can demonstrate your understanding of this core principle of perspective.

Next Steps:

Please submit an additional 25 cylinders around arbitrary minor axes. If you need further clarification or have other questions about the issues I've called out, please feel free to ask before starting on those revisions.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
3:15 AM, Wednesday November 3rd 2021

Hello, here are the revisions, https://imgur.com/a/wU7Chxs

6:26 PM, Wednesday November 3rd 2021

This is definitely a big improvement, so I will go ahead and mark this challenge as complete. One thing though - make sure that when you're drawing in the true minor axis line in red, that you are actually capturing it correctly. Some - like this one on 24 can be more than a bit off.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 6.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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