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5:20 PM, Friday October 8th 2021

Hello, and welcome to drawabox. I’ll look at this as-is, but in the future, we’d appreciate an imgur album containing as many photos as there’s pages in the submission requirements. Even if their quality is good, having to zoom in and out of pictures might lead to us missing a few details, which is not something you want. Let’s get to the critique.

Your superimposed lines look mostly good. I notice quite a bit of wobbling in your arcing lines, as well as some of the smaller straight lines. The longer ones, too, are a little insecure at their starts/ends. I’ll remind you that our goal in this course is not accuracy, but rather confidence. It’s perfectly fine to sacrifice the former for the latter. In other words, a confident line is correct, no matter what; a wobbly one, incorrect, no matter what. In the context of this exercise, this means that more so than sticking to the guideline, what matters is that the line itself is smooth. Your ghosted lines are a step in the right direction, though the planes take things back to prior. What’s likely happening is that you’re thinking of planes as a single unit, though they are in fact comprised of multiple lines. If your lines could be confident in the ghosted lines exercise, they can be confident here, too; after all, the process of drawing a line hasn’t changed. Another thing: you should be using start/end points for the non-diagonal center lines of your planes, too.

The table of ellipses exercise is not quite there, unfortunately. I can see that you’re making an attempt, but a lot of these marks are still lacking in confidence. It also seems as if you’re drawing a little bit quickly – either you’re confusing confidence with speed (they’re similar, but not necessarily the same), or you’re not ghosting enough. Finally, not all of these ellipses are touching all edges of the frame; some of them – for example: page 2, row 6 – are floating inside of their frames. I’ll address the two most important points. In regards to your speed, while fast will equal confidence at first, this is not always the case. Plus, it’s hard to tell whether your speed is just right, or too fast – both will lead to confident marks, though the latter will be much less accurate. It’s important, then, to find your ideal speed. You can do this very simply, by drawing a number of ellipses, each at a different speed, and going with the one that’s the most accurate, though still fully confident. As for the ghosting issues, it’s important to ghost until ready, rather than an arbitrary number of times. And when you commit, be sure to do so confidently – your accuracy is, after all, set in stone; all that you’re able to impact any longer is your confidence. The ellipses in planes show some improvement, in these respects, though they’re still visibly lacking in confidence. The same can be said for the funnels.

The plotted perspective exercise is well done, though it’s missing 3 back lines. I’ll also note that the hatching here should’ve been applied using a ruler, rather than freehand.

The rough perspective exercise looks quite good, by the end. Your linework is fairly confident, and your convergences show a considerable degree of planning. That said, I think you could spend even longer planning them, for better effect. Don’t feel obligated to stick to your first few guesses – keep altering your points, until you’re 100% satisfied. Finally, remember that each line is to be drawn once, and only once, regardless of how it turns out.

Save for the occasional dip in confidence (and the fact that not all boxes have been drawn through), the rotated boxes exercise looks good. I will remind you, however, that hatching lines (indeed, all lines) should be drawn using your shoulder, regardless of their length.

The organic perspective exercise seems to be missing. If you’d be so kind as to upload it, I’ll give you all of your feedback at once, as opposed to in chunks.

Next Steps:

2 pages of the organic perspective exercise.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
5:27 PM, Saturday October 9th 2021

Hi, I tried uploading the Organic Perspective pages but the response was I would have to pay for another credit. Do I have to pay again or is there another way that this is done?

Sorry about the missing pages I'm not quite sure how that happened. They're all together in my folder, so, I don't know.

JS.

5:44 PM, Saturday October 9th 2021

Benj, I just checked out my reddit homework lesson 1 submission and the 2 page Organic Perspective work was there. So, I don't know what's going on.

Johnny S.

8:03 AM, Sunday October 10th 2021

Hey hey; yeah, I'm not sure how I missed that. Sorry to have kept you waiting. By the way, you wouldn't have to pay an extra credit for a missing page, or a revision, you'd just reply to my comment with a link to it (for future reference, I mean). Let me look at this, and then ask for some revisions.

So, this exercise has the usual issues with line confidence, and automatic reinforcing, but the boxes themselves look good - really good, in fact. Their size and foreshortening is spot-on, and the compositions are really interesting, too, as per all of the overlaps.

Next Steps:

So all I'm going to need to see is another stab at the very basics. Please give me 1 page of ghosted planes, and 1 page of the table of ellipses exercise. Remember that confidence is your #1 (really, only) priority, and you may take some time to experiment with different speeds before you start, to find out what works for you.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
5:44 PM, Monday October 11th 2021

https://imgur.com/a/iVWzD0t

Here's the link to imgur do over pages.

I hope this works.

JS.

5:48 PM, Monday October 11th 2021

https://imgur.com/a/iVWzD0t

Just thought, I'd send it again just in case.

Revisions Lesson 1.

Johnny Socko

4:59 AM, Tuesday October 12th 2021

(It’s good that you did, because I didn’t get the first one; it needs to be sent as a reply to my comment (which notifies me), not a comment on the thread (it’s not my thread, so I get no notifications for that.) Anyway. This shows some good improvement, on both respects, so I’ll move you on to the box challenge. Do continue practicing these concepts in your own time, however, particularly your ellipses.

Next Steps:

250 box challenge.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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