This was originally submitted to community critique. I was asked to do some revisions. I am submitting the revised versions instead of the originals. You will see that one of the ellipses in planes exercise is a redo and I marked it in the description. (I am willing to do further revisions if needed)
Hi, I'm Salty and I'm a TA with DrawABox, I'll be handling your Lesson 1 Critique.
Lines:
There's some wobbling happening on some of these lines could mean you weren't executing your lines with as much confidence as you've shown with the shorter lines; this could be from not drawing from the shoulder all the way across or slowing down during the mark and letting your mind steer the stroke which is what we want to try and avoid.
Some wobbling is also present in the ghosted planes. From the moment you start executing the stroke, focus only on the end point and draw confidently as explained further here
Ellipses:
There are some uneven ellipses in your Table of Ellipses exercise. A confident execution leads to an evenly shaped ellipse, whereas hesitation leads to wobbling and uneven shapes just as it does for our lines explained here
As for the ellipses in planes, just refer to the above and remember it for the next time you do the exercise.
Perspective:
A couple of times your verticals aren't perpendicular to the Horizon Line, just be sure you are lining up your ruler correctly before executing in the future.
Your rough exercise seems to show you're rushing at making your marks rather than carefully analysing your next path. The same goes for your Organic Perspective Exercise, with your hatching in particular. If you put a mark down, that mark deserves to be given as much time as you require to execute it to the best of your current ability explained here
In the future, I'd suggest you just take more time in your approach and not rush things so much.
Next Steps:
You have the understanding of the material and your revisions show that you're understanding what the goal is. My only suggestion is to slow down and not rush yourself. I'm going to mark this as complete and move you on to the 250 Box Challenge.
Thanks for the review.
Where the rest of my recommendations tend to be for specific products, this one is a little more general. It's about printer paper.
As discussed in Lesson 0, printer paper (A4 or 8.5"x11") is what we recommend. It's well suited to the kind of tools we're using, and the nature of the work we're doing (in terms of size). But a lot of students still feel driven to sketchbooks, either by a desire to feel more like an artist, or to be able to compile their work as they go through the course.
Neither is a good enough reason to use something that is going to more expensive, more complex in terms of finding the right kind for the tools we're using, more stress-inducing (in terms of not wanting to "ruin" a sketchbook - we make a lot of mistakes throughout the work in this course), and more likely to keep you from developing the habits we try to instill in our students (like rotating the page to find a comfortable angle of approach).
Whether you grab the ream of printer paper linked here, a different brand, or pick one up from a store near you - do yourself a favour and don't make things even more difficult for you. And if you want to compile your work, you can always keep it in a folder, and even have it bound into a book when you're done.
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