7:34 AM, Saturday November 20th 2021
Hi there, I'll be handling your box challenge critique.
Not only does the challenge help deepen your understanding of important concepts but it shows your desire to learn as well. That being said I'll try to keep this critique fairly brief so you can get working on the next steps as soon as possible.
Things you did well:
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Your lines are looking mostly confident. There is the occasional bit of wobbling which shows that you may still be hesitating, this is likely from you trying to keep your lines accurate. Just remember confidence is our top priority and accuracy will improve with mileage.
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You're experimenting wh orientations, and proportions which is nice to see. Experimenting is an important habit to build when learning any new skill, it helps form a more well rounded understanding. I hope you continue to display this habit in the future as well.
Things to work on:
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Your hatching could be a bit tidier. When applying it be sure to plan every line with the ghosting technique and then draw them confidently. Try to have each end of the line touch an edge of the box as well rather than just leaving them floating in the middle of the plane.
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It's not a requirement of the challenge but I suggest trying to implement line weight in your future work. Most people need a bit of mileage before they feel comfortable applying it so getting an early start will help you see positive results sooner.
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You're not experimenting much with rates of foreshortening and tend to keep your vanishing point far from your box. This results in you making most of your lines as parallel as you can, be sure to mix it up more b ybringing your vanishing points closer and seeing how your lines react. Remember experimenting is important.
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Quite regularly (all of the boxes on the last page for example) you extend at least one set of lines in the wrong direction. This is caused by you imagining your vanishing point between the box and the viewer which results in you lines actually diverging from where the vanishing point would be and your boxes becoming distorted. Here's a guide I wrote that will hopefully help you understand how to place both your vanishing points and line extensions consistently.
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There are times when your lines converge in pairs or you attempt to keep your lines a bit too parallel which results in them diverging. This is an example of lines converging in pairs, and this shows the relation between each line in a set and their respective vanishing point. The inner pair of lines will be quite similar unless the box gets quite long and the outer pair can vary a lot depending on the location of the vanishing point. Move it further away and the lines become closer to parallel while moving it closer increases the rate of foreshortening
The key things we want to remember from this exercise are that our lines should always converge as a set not in pairs, never diverge from the vanishing point and due to perspective they won't be completely parallel.
I won't be moving you on to the next lesson just yet, each lesson builds off concepts in the previous course material so if you move forward with un-addressed issues you end up just creating further issues on top of them.
I'd like you to draw 25 more boxes please. Focus on getting your lines to extend towards a consistent vanishing point and be sure to keep experimenting with rates of foreshortening as well. You may want to get some hatching and line weight practice in as well to help see improved results with these useful tools.
Once you've completed your boxes reply to this critique with a link to them, I'll address anything that needs to be worked on and once you've shown you're ready I'll move you on to the next lesson.
I know you can do this and look forward to seeing your work.
Next Steps:
25 more boxes