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12:07 PM, Saturday February 8th 2020
edited at 12:08 PM, Feb 8th 2020

Hi again!

Pretty good improvement overall!

In your arrows I can see that you are already thinking on making them bigger as they come towards the viewer, some of there are still not there yet, like the top left arrow, but as long as you are consciously trying to do it, that's okay!

One thing you aren't doing in your arrows is adding lineweight. It helps a lot to clarify the arrows, and you can do it like this those red lines are the added lineweight. Remember that you should do them, just like every other line, ghosted, and with a confident stroke

For your organic forms you are mostly accomplishing the sausage forms, though there are some that are pinching a bit at the end, remember that the end should be a ball, so it should be quite rounded.

In your form intersections you still got some repeated lines, as you can see here, so keep trying to be aware as much as you can of it. I know it's hard to resist the urge to correct lines, but it's very important not to do it.

And lastly on your organic intersections they look much more believable as 3d forms interacting with each other, only problem you have is that some of them still are quite complex. Here the organic forms should be just like on the organic forms exercises you did before, so draw them just like you would draw them there. Corrected a few here, so you can see what I'm talking about, some of those are bulging, some are more like stretched ellipses etc.

I think It'd be pretty helpful for you if you rewatched the organic intersections video on the website, it's explained there pretty nicely.

Remember as well that you need to do 10-15 minutes of warmups before starting every drawabox session. In those 10-15 minutes, you should pick 2-3 exercises between all the exercises of lesson 1-2, boxes and the technical exercises on lesson 3, and work on them in that time.

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Overall I can see a good deal of improvement over what I told you, and though you got some repeated lines, and your organic intersections need a bit more of polish, I'm gonna mark this as complete.

Try to focus on the organic intersections exercises on your warmups for now.

Keep up the good work and good luck on your next lesson! Which should be lesson 3, though I'm seeing on your submissions you've already submitted it. Wait until it gets critiqued to go on to the next lessons, so you can apply what you are told on next lessons

This community member feels the lesson should be marked as complete, and 2 others agree. The student has earned their completion badge for this lesson and should feel confident in moving onto the next lesson.
edited at 12:08 PM, Feb 8th 2020
2:11 PM, Monday February 17th 2020
edited at 11:45 PM, Feb 17th 2020

Elodin, any ideas how I can get more visibility on the second submission to get Lesson 2 badge?

edited at 11:45 PM, Feb 17th 2020
8:03 PM, Monday February 17th 2020

Posted it on the discord to see if someone takes a look at it

11:46 PM, Monday February 17th 2020

Thanks so much man.

2:30 PM, Saturday February 8th 2020

Will do. Starting to understand the process more. I am gonna go back and resubmit Lesson 3, there is copic marker use on some of them. Before this feature I was getting feedback from an Industrial Designer at work and he was pushing me to think about light and shadow. Thank you again for your time and feedback. The community here is incredible.

Alan

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