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3:06 PM, Friday June 4th 2021

About the name thing, lol it's completely alright,I didn't think anything about it, it's just a normal username.

About the repeating thing though, keep in mind that when me or uncomfortable ask you to do 1 page is because we're asking you to do one page. So do one page and then submit. Not grinding is the best course of action for you to take, trust uncomfortable on that.

Now the thing you should aim for is not to get good results, but to approach the exercise correctly. You're not being critiqued by how good your boxes look, but for how good you approached drawing them, that's why repeating exercises isn't helpful.

The main things I see that is causing you to approach them wrong, mainly because of rushing are:

-Sometimes some of your lines fray in 2 ends, which tell me that you aren't placing the pen carefully at the start of every line.

-Some lines seem like don't have starting and ending points, before drawing any line you should always start by drawing their starting and ending points.

-Some lines diverge very clearly, which hints that you aren't paying as much attention as you could for their convergences. Whenever you draw a starting and ending dot for a line, you can extend that line by ghosting and check how far it is from the vanishing point. If it's not close, then you can just redraw the dots over and over until you're satisfied.

Lastly, lines are overall better, but still a bit wobbly. Take a reread at the ghosted lines exercise. Remember that you're aiming here for doing the ghosted line exercise well, and that means drawing your lines confidently. How the result does look on the box does not matter because the important thing is that you learn, not that the result looks good.

Having said all that I want you to do another page more of this exercise, good luck and keep it up! (And don't forget the rotated boxes page)

Next Steps:

-1 more page of the rough perspective exercise.

  • remaining page of rotated boxes
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7:39 PM, Friday June 4th 2021

Elodin,

Ah. Uncomfortable's voice came back in my head, reading this. Definitely forgot not to do grinding. Thank you for the notes, and for also the reminder to pay more attention to where I'm placing my pen when connecting lines. I hope that is reflected in my resubmissions.

I have redone the Rough Perspective and also completed the Rotated boxes. Please let me know if I can head onwards to the 250 box challenge: https://imgur.com/a/sDIJxiB

If I don't hear from you beforehand, I hope you have a good weekend!

Thank you for your time,

Sandy

4:44 PM, Sunday June 6th 2021

Hello! Good job on the redos! I think your lines are a bit better. The main problem with it is that I still think you might not be understanding the point of the exercise or just rushing a bit still.

The lines on the boxes of this exercise must all be directed to the vanishing point you declared in the lines at the start. Whenever you draw an starting dot and an ending dot for a line make sure you ghost to check if the line goes correctly towards the vanishing point. You can check this several times until you're satisfied. If at any case a dot is off, then just redraw the dot and check again. Only when you're sure start ghosting the line.

I'm saying this because some of the lines you drew are pretty off, the kind of off that you can notice if you ghost towards the vanishing point.

Here's one example with one of your boxes corrected. Still not perfect, lines don't match exactly the vanishing point, but hopefully it makes it easier to understand.

The rotated boxes is a very good attempt. Most of the boxes are rotating and you're keeping the corners between boxes close, so good job! Just keep in mind that some boxes you drew aren't rotating, so keep an eye on it on the next attempts you do at this exercise.

So before moving on I want you to do the exercise one more time. Make sure you check every line, and in case you find one that is going to be off, redraw the dots before drawing the line as much times as you need. Take your time and don't forget you don't need to finish it in one go, spend as much time as necesary.

Next Steps:

1 more page of rough perspective

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
6:20 PM, Monday June 7th 2021
edited at 6:43 PM, Jun 7th 2021

Hoping this is better: https://imgur.com/a/ih025w6

Thank you!

Sandy

edited at 6:43 PM, Jun 7th 2021
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