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8:49 AM, Friday December 23rd 2022
Hello, I'll be critiquing your work. Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1.
Lines
In your Superimposed Lines exercise, some of your lines at the beginning fray a little. Remember to commit to the line and focus on placing your pen down near where the start is.
Taking your time to do so with every line helps. Remember that even if they fray away wildly at the end it's fine, but do not fray at the beginning.
Another thing is that they tend to arch upwards, especially on the first picture you've shown.
Making faster deliberate strokes would help, or to slightly arch your lines in the opposite direction. Remember that you should be comfortable enough to be doing these exercises and slow down.
Your Planes are not always accurately divided, and while it isn't too important, it should be worth nothing. Take your time to consider each line and remember the ghosting method.
I find that you aren't drawing enough planes to fill the page. While your planes are of varying sizes, there are huge gaps that you can fill with throughout the two pages you have shown.
Ellipses
Your Tables of Ellipses are all filled up, and you seem to be drawing them about 2-3 times through, which is a good thing -- and you are prioritizing accuracy. However, most of your ellipses tend to overlap, and should instead be touching each other.
Your Ellipses in Planes are good, but as said above, you should draw more of them where they should fit the entire page.
The ellipses in your Funnels are mostly symmetrical and are generally in tandem with the axis, and are also drawn snugly. While the biggest one is wobbly due to the page not fitting, that isn't too much of an issue.
Boxes
Regarding your Rough Perspective, some of your boxes width and height are not parallel to the horizon. It's okay to overshoot your the end point of your freehand lines, so long as you have a clear goal of where your line goes.
The Rotated Boxes challenge is very difficult so you should know that you've done a good job completing it. With that being said, while your rotations are good, there are quite a few gaps between the rotating boxes, when they should be narrower.
The Organic Perspective pages are both packed with an good amount of solid boxes. It's normal that this exercise is quite difficult.
Next Steps:
Complete one more Superimposed Lines exercise focusing on making your lines straight(er), and two more Ellipses in Planes, focusing to fill up the entire page.
10:22 AM, Saturday December 24th 2022
Hello and thank you for the critique. Here is my revisions: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1b6D8KHYD7VrymfvCxfdDg_CosHAUC723?usp=sharing
11:17 PM, Sunday December 25th 2022
The Planes are much better this time, though I would've recommended drawing smaller ones that gradually fill up the page to make sure you're doing more in repetition, but it isn't too important.
Your Superimposed lines still do fray away a little at the beginning, but I believe you get the gist. When you repeat this exercise inevitably when you reach across Lesson 2 (or even during the 250 Box Challenge) as a warmup, remember to take your time.
Next Steps:
250 Box Challenge
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