Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
11:28 PM, Sunday October 13th 2024
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Hello, I'll give a quick critique of your lesson 1 work.
Broadly speaking it looks as if your lines have a lot of wobble to them. I would suggest going back over the section that discusses the ghosting method and work on getting those lines looking confident so they flow, no need to worry about accuracy yet. Theres even quite a few lines that look as if youve gone over a second or third time. Remember, once youve committed to the execution of a mark then the time to worry about mistakes is over, let it ride and learn from it rather than trying to redo it as the purpose of the homework isnt for it to look good but to show you understand the lesson. Even in just this work here I can tell some line improvement over time assuming you did it all in order, but that wobble is still there. A trick thats helped me is to ghost the line, but when its time to mark, focus on the end point rather than letting my eyes follow the tip of my pen as it marks.
Your superimposed lines have some fraying at both ends, suggesting you might not be taking the time to consider the marks here before starting. This is before the ghosting methods is talked about much but even there we should be making sure the pen starts at the same point each time.
However, moving on from lines, I must say your ellipses look great, they are consistent, usually well proportioned, and fairly accurate. I'll only say that for the funnels you have a consistent amount of tilt on the minor axis, meaning the funnels are slanted. I would recommend keeping the funnels exercise in your warmups and work on getting them straight but considering how good they are otherwise you should try the level 2 version of the exercise. I recommend checking out the homework page to get an in depth explanation from the lesson but in short level 2 is widening out the degree of your ellipses as they get further from the center of the funnel.
For your rough perspective boxes they look pretty good over all, you definitely understand the goal of the lesson here. Your boxes do however have some edges that, instead of converging, diverge or remain parallel. This crops up again for both the rotated boxes and organic perspective boxes. In the rotated box, it comes out looking square, partially because theres a very slight amount of rotation occuring but many of the boxes have these parallel lines. However while there is some inconsistent gaps here and there it looks like you understood to keep them close together. I might just suggest taking another read over that section of the lession, remember that as the boxes change rotation the vanishing points are going to move at different rates along the horizon line. Finally for the organic perspective, yours looks pretty clean overall, just that same issue of some parallel lines (or even diverging ones) where they should be converging. remember in this exercise, once you have made a single line from your Y that line should then inform the direction of the next mark you make. Because when we draw our Y we dont know where our vanishing points are, we just know the direction (they are somewhere, up to infinity, along the path of the arms of the Y). once we draw a line that converges with an arm of the Y then we have technically decided where that vanishing point is, even if its way of the page.
All in all, looks like you have a good understanding of the point behind the lesson, good work!
Next Steps:
Incorporate all the homework from lesson 1 into warmups, primarily working on the ghosting method to get lines to flow confidently and working on estimating where edges on a box should converge.
Move on to the 250 Box challenge.
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