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12:09 AM, Wednesday December 1st 2021
edited at 12:10 AM, Dec 1st 2021

Hey there! Congrats on completing lesson 1. Here's what I think:

Superimposed Lines: You did well in making sure you started at the same spot for most of the superimposed lines. I do notice a bit of fraying on both ends, so make sure to be careful and start right where you started. I also noticed that as you draw out the superimposed lines, they seem to skew away from the original. While you should not aim for perfection in this exercise, you still should aim to get close to the original line as best as possible. One thing I would recommend is slowing down a bit while doing this exercise. You don't want to be going too slowly that you are wobbling while drawing, but you want to go at a steady and confident pace. Also, I would push you to do some curved lines. They don't have to be complex, just a simple curved line or a C or an S, and attempt to superimpose that. This will be harder than straight lines, so don't expect to get very close to the original, but it can help give you confidence when it comes to other exercises in the future that deal with curves. I would encourage you to incorporate this in your future warmups.

Ghosted Lines: Your lines do well in intersecting both points, and I don't detect too much wobbliness in your lines. However, I do see some arching of the lines, so make sure that you keep using your shoulder to draw. Another thing I noticed was that your lines are mostly short. As you go more into this exercise, you will have to deal with several different sizes of lines. Make sure that when you do this exercise for warmup in the future that you vary the lengths of the lines so you can get experience on how to deal with that.

Ghosted Planes: This is where varying your lines' length comes into play, and I think you did well in that. There are some instances of overshooting and undershooting. One of the things that Uncomfortable mentions is lifting your pen off as soon as you get to your destination. This will come with time, so keep on practicing. I do also see some arching and wobbling, so as with the ghosted lines, make sure your strokes are confident and done with the shoulder.

Table of Ellipses: I can see that you only drew through your ellipses twice; good on following those instructions. There is some wobbliness with the ellipses, as well as open shapes, so continue to work on drawing them confidently and steadily. One thing that I would ask you to delve into more is different sizes and orientations of ellipses. In this exercise, you are encouraged to explore different shapes and sizes of ellipses. I got hints of that in your exercises, but I only see three or four different orientations. I would encourage you to do two more pages of this exercise again, and this time incorporating different degrees of ellipses in each section and drawing a little more slowly, but confidently. Vary between very skinny ellipses to very fat ellipses (essentially circles), too.

Ellipses in Planes: Similar to the table of ellipses, make sure that you continue to confidently draw through your ellipses. There is some wobbliness and openness in them. Plus, you want to aim to have the ellipses touch all four sides of the plane as best as possible. You managed to do that with most of them, but there were some that overshot or undershot the target. Make sure you take your time with them as you are drawing them during your warmups.

Funnels: You did well in making sure the ellipses were aligned, but it seems that a majority of them were too loose in this exercise. In some instances, they peek outside of the funnels, and in others, they are intersecting other ellipses. Once again, perfection isn't necessary, but you want to still aim to stay steady and keep the looseness to a minimum. I would recommend doing this exercise again and taking your time to tighten up your ellipses and keep them in the funnels as best as you can. It's okay if not all the ellipses stay snug inside the funnel or if they intersect a little, but still aim to do your best in that. One other thing: continue to work on the confidence of your ellipses. While you don't draw over your ellipses too many times, there are a lot of instances where they seem open or wobbly. This will get better with time, but make sure you are drawing with your shoulder and not going too fast.

Plotted Perspective: You did really well on this exercise. I think you understood how to use 2-point perspective. To take this exercise to the next level in future warmups, I would recommend going over the main box outline to highlight the object over all the lines. Sometimes, with all the lines in place, it becomes difficult to make out what we need to focus on, and this will make it easier on the viewer's eyes. This will also be important in future exercises, so feel free to practice this now.

Rough Perspective: This is one of the harder exercises, and I think you did well on this. You tried different box sizes and different perspectives, and you understood the exercise well. There is a bit of wobbliness in the lines, so continue to work on confidence. Also, when you are doing this for warmup in the future, make sure to only do 4-6 boxes per panel. This will make it easier to view how the boxes relate to the horizon. In your exercises, the amount of boxes crowded the panel, so it was a little harder to tell which lines belonged to which box.

Rotated Boxes: Probably the hardest exercise in this module. It seems that you did the best you could here. You made a good effort on rotating boxes. One thing to keep in mind is that there are some inconsistent gaps between your boxes. I won't make you do this exercise again, but as you go into future exercises, keeping gaps consistent makes it easier for the viewer to infer space and perspective. Another thing I noticed is that some boxes (primarily the ones of both ends) are not completely drawn in. This will be important in the 250 box challenge, but make sure to draw through your boxes so you can understand if it makes sense in 3D space.

Organic Perspective: You did alright on this exercise, but I think you missed a key point of it. One of the main ideas is to play with perspective by varying the sizes of the boxes. It seems that in the beginning of each panel, you start off well by making the boxes bigger, but as they taper off, you stop getting smaller at a certain point. This is where varying the sizes of your lines and boxes come into play, so you can better communicate perspective. You don't need to redo this exercise, but in future lessons where size and perspective come into play (especially in the constructional lessons), keep this in mind.

Overall, nice work on the exercises. I would encourage you to slow down a little while doing the warmups and continue to draw confidently. Also, in future exercises, try not to crowd the page. Aim for about the same amount of figures that Uncomfortable places at the end of each exercise. For now, I would redo two pages of the table of ellipses. Once I check that and it looks good, I think you are ready to move on to the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

Redo:

2 pages of table of ellipses: vary degree of ellipses and work on steady, confident ellipses

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 12:10 AM, Dec 1st 2021
12:54 AM, Thursday December 2nd 2021

I just saw this message when I moved onto 250 box challenge and I currently completed 21 boxes. Wish I saw your message earlier but I will keep that in mind for future boxes. Will redo the exercises you mentioned when I finish my Warmups

11:44 PM, Thursday December 2nd 2021

https://imgur.com/a/FTpYppg Completed the redo of the assignment

1:19 AM, Friday December 3rd 2021

These look a little better, but it still seems a little rushed. Some of the ellipses look open. I'll mark you as complete, but you might want to do this for warmups and focus on slowing down while drawing confidently. Feel free to continue the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

Continue 250 box challenge.

Continue table of ellipses for warmups.

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