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10:54 AM, Thursday April 18th 2024
Hi, I'm Laura, I'll do your critique.
Lines
Superimposed Lines - Looks good, starts with fraying at the end, and reduces some in subsequent lines. It feels to me you're possible doing the marks too fast? Try slowing down, a bit, and only looking at the end point, this should help reduce fraying.
Ghosted Lines & Ghosted Planes - Looks good, though there's a lot of arcing, which can be counteracted with more consciously using your shoulder to execute the strokes, and trying to intentionally arch the line in the opposite direction to cancel it out if it persists.
Looks like ou understood the line exerices, any wavering and arcing should improve in time with the mentioned tips.
Ellipses
Table Ellipses - Drawn through well, and fitted to their sorroundings, but there's a lot of egg shaped ellipses, Using your shoulder is major help here, try to minimize movement from the elbow or wrist, and try to follow the first rotation of the ellipse with the second one as closely as you can.(This section helps with more explanation https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/remember)
Ellipses in planes - Same as the previous one, I would recommed you focus on smoothness even more here, as a smooth and round ellipse is better than one that accurately fits the plane.
Funnels - The ellipses are right on the line, and mostly fit their borders as they should.
Overall you understood the assignments, but rereading and rewatching this section https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/remember and implementing the tips should help improve your understanding and execution.
Boxes
Plotted perspective- All good.
Rough perspective - Looks good, though the lines look a bit wobbly, make sure to implement the ghosting method and give yourself more time to put down the the dots and the marks. Also I am not sure but I think I see repeated lines? You really shouldn't repeat lines, it crushes your confidence and diminishes learning opportunities, you should let the first mark you put down stay where it is and continue on with other marks, using the ghosting method will improve them.
Rotated boxes - You kept the boxes tight, rotated them well, and drew all of them, very good, don't have anything to say here.
Organic Perspective - It's a bit confusing to look at with the lines swirling all over, but it looks like you understood the exercise and executed it correctly, good job.
You understood the exerices and executed them to good effect.
Summary
Understood everything and executed them well, I think You're good to continue to the 250 Box challenge.
Make sure to add all lesson 1 exercises to your warmup pool.
Next Steps:
Add all lesson 1 exercises to your warmup pool and continue onto the 250 Box Challenge.
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