4:33 PM, Sunday January 16th 2022
Hello I’ll be taking a look at your lesson 3
-Starting with the arrows section you are doing an excellent job here, you have kept in mind the rate of foreshortening, keep in mind that the negative space between the zigzagging sections of the ribbon has to decrease as it moves further away, you have nailed this though and the applications of lineweight are well done too.
-Moving on to the leaves there are a few things to call out. Once you have drawn the edges for your leave you want to respect them any extra details have to go on top or below it but they always have to return to the flow line, when building complex leaf structures each flow line has to end right at the edges, take a look at this demo.
-Your branches are turning out well, just keep these points in mind.
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Each segment has to extend fully halfway to the next ellipse, most of yours do but sometimes you fall short.
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Be cognizant of the degree shifts of the ellipses, I think you are moving in the right direction but there are branches that have ellipses with more or less the same degree.
Let’s move on to the plant constructions.
-So I can see that you have mixed results, make sure you apply the principles highlighted in the technical exercises to each one of your plants, and above all do not try to skip any steps in the construction, but let’s go through some specifics.
-The first thing I want to call out is the degree shifts in the ellipses of the branches, most of your plant stems show little to no degree shifts, this is an important point as it helps us to establish the perspective of the plant.
-Taking a look at this flower and this one, make sure you do not leave any arbitrary gaps in the petals, you want to end each petal/leaf right where the flow line ends, also try to add the little arrowhead to each petal to reinforce their fluidity and the way they move through space.
-Taking a look at the flower here, I think you were a little eager to jump right into the details, I don’t see you employing any constructional steps to draw the petals or scales I don’t really know how to call them. The important thing to remember here is that you should draw each petal in its entirety, each one is no less important for being part of a larger group, and drawing each one in its entirety will help you to develop your spatial reasoning skills
-When drawing pots or any kind of structure that relies heavily on the use of ellipses you have to align them with a minor axis line, every extra detail has to be tightly bound to the preceding structure that is how we are able to carry the solidity form the simpler stages to the more complex ones.
-When drawing succulents like the one here make sure you use a few contour lines to convey their thickness.
So the key things you want to take from this critique are these.
-Draw one thing at a time, and focus on every single mark. Use the ghosting method to ensure that you're considering what each mark's purpose is, and how you're going to achieve it best. If you have a plant with many leaves, each individual leaf's flow line is no less important for being part of a larger group
-Draw each form in its entirety. There will be circumstances where, say, a flower has so many petals that they overlap one another. Instead of allowing the petals to cut each other off, draw each and every one in its entirety. These are all just exercises in spatial reasoning, and drawing each form in its entirety will help you better understand how those forms relate to one another in 3D space.
Next Steps:
I'll have you do some revisions.
-1 page of leaves
-2 more plant constructions, don't go past the constructional phase for these ones I don't want you to get overwhelmed by the details. Also try to stick to one plant per page for these ones.
I look forward to seeig your work good luck.