Hi Neojazz!

I'll be doing your critique today! :)

LINES

• Super Imposed Lines - You've done well to make sure you start each line at the same dot as there is no fraying at the beginning and only a small amount of fraying at the end, but the latter is expected. Nicely done here. However, I can see you're not exactly confident with your strokes as there is a little wobble to the lines. I'm guessing that you were trying to reduce the fraying at the end i.e. focusing on accuracy than confidence. Note that in this lesson the focus is on confidence and not accuracy. Keep practising drawing these lines with confidence in mind. The lines should be relatively straight even though they may not reach the endpoint you have your eye on. Have a review of this section to keep in mind - https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/wobbling. Aside from that, not too bad overall.

• Ghosted Lines - You've done well here! You've ghosted enough that you've accurately started at the starting point and even reached very near the endpoint as well. It can be clearly seen that with your ghosting, you gained a lot of confidence in your mark-making. Very nice! I see wobbling on 2-3 lines but with ghosting practise it'll go away. Nicely done!

• Ghosted Planes - The ghosted planes aren't bad too. There are some subtle s/c-curved lines which show that you're slightly hesitating when marking or that you are focusing too much on accuracy thus sacrificing confidence in return. Once again it is the confidence issue coming back. For the subtle c-curved lines, one thing that you can do is to consciously arch the opposite way to maintain a straight line when ghosting, this can help lessen the arching problem. For the subtle s-curved line, try to ghost a lot of times before actually committing to it, you can also increase the speed of ghosting. Again, with practise and more ghosting this will come to you. Keep these points in mind when doing these exercises during your warm-ups.

ELLIPSES

• Tables of Ellipses - Your table needs a little work here. You've not fit your ellipses within the bounds of the table. The purpose of the table is to ensure that you try to touch the edges of the ellipses to the borders of each row and each other. Your ellipses seem to be floating of sorts and this is something that was mentioned in the lesson - https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/nogoal. In addition, I'm not sure if you're ghosting enough as well. The 3rd column on the 1st page clearly shows this as the 2nd stroke on some of the ellipses is completely different from the 1st stroke. To improve here, take your time to ghost. I'm not sure if you're being impatient with yourself but this is not a race. If you can practise taking the time to ghost, your ellipses will be far more accurate. Also, there is a small bit of wobbling that can be seen. Again, all these issues can be solved by taking a little more time to ghost. Please make sure that the pen you use is correctly working as I feel a pen that is running out would hinder how smoothly you can draw as well.

• Ellipses in Planes - Your ellipses here do reach the bounds of each pane majority of the time so you've done a little better here. The second stroke of some ellipses does reach a little away from the first stroke similar to some of the ellipses in the table before but that can be fixed with practise. Once again ghosting will greatly improve how close together the two strokes of each ellipse will be.

• Funnels -Again, it's pretty much the same feedback. Ghosting is required here. The funnel in the middle above the largest one clearly shows signs of all the issues I've mentioned. You have however managed to draw the ellipses such that the minor axis (the line in the middle) is cutting the ellipses into 2 relatively symmetrical halves so good job on that aspect.

BOXES

• Plotted Perspective - Everything looks good here, no issues!

• Rough Perspective - Good job on keeping the lines either perpendicular or horizontal to the horizon! Also, you've accurately used the line correction method and drawn through most of your boxes though in some boxes of the first page-first row, you've missed out some corners of the boxes. Note that every box must have 4 correction lines but some of the boxes only have 3. Also, there's a little wobble/curving to your lines. This can be prevented by ghosting a little more as well as by consciously arching the opposite way to maintain a straight line when ghosting as mentioned earlier. Use your shoulder more to mark the paper as using your wrist greatly increases your chances of curved lines. Keep practising from the shoulder and arching in the opposite direction than which you tend to draw and your lines will be straighter!

• Rotated Boxes - Good job here! Some students really struggle with this exercise. It is clear that your spatial awareness is good as you've rotated your boxes quite accurately however the distance between each corner of the boxes should be a little more closer. A little bit of curving and wobble can be seen here too in your line work but I'm sure this will improve over time. Nicely done overall!

• Organic Perspective - The organic boxes look good! You've kept a good sense of rotation as well as perspective here too so good job! The line wobbling can be seen here too though. Even the swoopy line we needed to draw at the start has wobbling. Once again, this shows it's a matter of confidence as there is wobble in a line which didn't even have any rules to adhere to. Also, the S and C-curves can be seen too. I've noticed you do better on the larger boxes than on the smaller ones as you struggle to figure out the sides of the boxes when it's smaller. But don't worry, you'll have time to improve on these as you practise more.

All in all, this submission needs a little work. You've struggled with gaining confidence in your strokes so I'd like you to redo some of the homework as I don't feel you're confident enough to move on to the next lesson. Also please make sure that your pen is working correctly before doing the revisions.