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7:26 PM, Monday December 19th 2022

You don't need to apologize - there's no timeline required for submitting revisions. This is a course that people complete at their pace, and while it is of course the student's responsibility to ensure that they're doing what they can to follow the instructions they're given as closely as possible (ideally without redoing work, but given all the things that got in the way, I understand why you went about it that way - I just wouldn't recommend grinding like that in the future), there is no expectation in how long that will take.

Overall your work is coming along quite well, but I added a couple notes of things to keep an eye on here:

  • At the back of the neck there, you've got a mass running right along the edge of the ribcage - this is two 2D shapes interacting with one another, but it's not a 3D relationship that you're defining. To make it 3D, you actually have to wrap along the surface of the ribcage ball form (or as we'll discuss in the next point, along the surface of the torso sausage that engulfs it).

  • I noted that with the mass along the underbelly, you've got it wrapping similarly along the edge of the ribcage ball. Remember that the ribcage ball gets engulfed by the sausage, and does not protrude from it - so it kinda ceases to be relevant, and wouldn't be something you'd wrap along. Instead you'd be running along the torso sausage, like the masses I drew along the back of the neck.

  • Along the leg, I noted that you're focusing your masses to capture specific bumps on the silhouette, individually. What we want to push towards is achieving an interlocking structure, forcing us to consider how these different masses fit together.

  • Your head constructions are definitely coming along, though don't be afraid to draw those eyeballs bigger. Also, because we're working in 3D space, they do not have to fit right inside of the eye socket shapes - as you can see how I drew them, some of them are offset a bit, due to them sitting a little behind that surface level of the face.

So, keep at it, but as it stands you're heading in the right direction and doing so fairly well. I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Feel free to move onto the 250 cylinder challenge, which is a prerequisite for Lesson 6.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
6:45 AM, Tuesday December 20th 2022

Thank you very much for your critique.

And thank you for your advices about the legs construction and of not running along the silhouette : I realize I hadn't understood these points yet which led me to draw 2D shapes.

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