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2:27 AM, Friday December 24th 2021

Hello, Neosynthetica.

Try not to worry too much about your previous work, as I am only judging you based on your Lesson 1 submission today. Let's get started!

Lines:

Superimposed Lines:

The top lines to your first page have a little bit of wobble to them. Even a small amount of wobble is still a mistake and should be noted. However, I also see no fraying on both ends so good job there.

Ghosted Lines:

Try not to connect each line into what appears to be an abstract shape. By doing so, you risk not fully understanding your own trajectory. It can be hard knowing where your line ends, and where it begins. If you are having trouble, refer back to the example homework under this lesson.

Ghosted Planes:

There is some overshooting and undershooting, so what I recommend is more ghosting before making lines. Try lifting your pen off the page the second you hit the end point as well!

Ellipses:

Tables of Ellipses:

The position on some ellipses should be drawn with a more concrete goal of fitting them snug against other ellipses and your columns. Otherwise, good job on confidence over accuracy.

Ellipses in Planes:

These planes look like they have a lot more confidence to your last ones. For future reference, the same ghosted planes can be used to put your ellipses in. The ellipses themselves are rough around the edges and not usually connecting on one side, so fast confident strokes just like your planes can help.

Ellipses in Funnels:

Knowing your own mistakes is a useful skill, but try not to put X symbols inside of your funnels. From what I can tell, you've started on either end of your funnels and had confidence but struggled with the middle sections. I suggest working from the minor axis, then drawing your ellipses outwards instead. Your goal is to have the minor axis cut the middle ellipse in half.

Boxes:

Plotted Perspective:

One of your top boxes towards the bottom column has a slight touch of distortion. Other than that, you seem to grasp this lesson well.

Rough Perspective:

Many of your depth lines converge parallel to the horizon line, save for a couple stray lines on your middle section.

Be mindful of keeping the bottom of your boxes perpendicular to the horizon as well.

Rotated Boxes:

Your boxes are accurately rotated. The side faces of your rotated boxes may appear squished as a set, due to not giving the sides of these boxes enough space. Compare the edges of these rotated boxes to the rest of the set.

Organic Perspective:

A few of these boxes don't form a box shape and have a slant towards the back. You'll also want to be careful of clumping too many boxes together, as you still want to see the edges and shapes that make up your boxes while still maintaining the flow of your swooping line.

So, overall I see many improvements here as you did more lessons. More confidence too! I would like to see another set of Ghosted Lines before you move on so you can better understand the lines you are making towards your marks using the ghosting method. After that, I will mark your lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Use the ghosting method to fill a page with straight lines. Do not worry about overlapping the page. Just do your best to focus on each individual line.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
4:49 AM, Sunday December 26th 2021

Hey, thanks for getting back to me! Below is a revision of the ghosted lines page, keep in mind that I originally did this in August and have had a lot of practice since then.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1h2dlWtu2nuiigB2ICxuQk_rnkwYibeFE/view?usp=sharing

2:39 AM, Tuesday January 4th 2022

Excellent work! You definitely have improved, so I'll mark Lesson1 as complete. Move onward to the 250 box challenge!

This community member feels the lesson should be marked as complete, and 2 others agree. The student has earned their completion badge for this lesson and should feel confident in moving onto the next lesson.
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