Hello there!
I hope I can give some good feedback and some useful critiques to your lesson 1 submission. Even if I'm inexperienced with this. So bear with me.
•Firstly,
The Lines Section:
The lines on the superimposed page are fairly smooth, though lots of arching on the longer lines.
And the other lines of the rest of the submission also suffer from this (excluding the ellipses). One way to mitigate and correct this, is to arc in the opposite direction when ghosting.
Additionally ghosting more until you are comfortable with executing the line, can also improve line confidence.
•Next,
The Ellipses Section:
The ellipses on the funnel page are not aligned enough with the center line. I recommend atleast rereading the funnel homework page, especially the common mistakes and how to correct them.
As for the other ellipses homeworks, they need a bit more work with the smoothness, remember to always aim for confidence over accuracy.
•Lastly,
The Boxes Section:
Not a whole lot of specific critiques for these homeworks, but some of the rough perspective horizontal and vertical lines aren't parallel with their respective axes. And some of the perspective of the organic and rough boxes are also off. But most of these can be fixed with the 250 box challenge.
TLDR:
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Line confidence needs a bit of work, and correction of the arcing of lines are also needed.
Always prioritize confidence over accuracy. And always ghost as much as you need to, keeping in mind countering the arc, by arcing in the opposite direction.
The ellipses on the funnel page don't align well with the center line and aren't halved symmetrically. I recommend re-read the homework page of that.
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On the topic of the other criteria and rules set by the lessons, everything has been followed and aimed for fairly reasonably. And I believe the mistakes that I have seen can/will be ironed out by the 250 box challenge.
With that, I believe that you (perhaps with two more agrees from others, or perhaps not) can move forward with the box challenge.
This is my first time doing this kind of thing, so if you or anyone else has any critiques or feedback of your own on my critiquing, I welcome them.
And Finally, Thank You!
for giving your time to reading this, I hope I helped and you can take some useful stuff from my feedback,
GraffitiCan.
Next Steps:
I recommend going through with the next step of the lessons, which is the 250 box challenge.
Woah thanks a lot again!
Even though it's your first time, you were able to give me helpful tips. It was definitely worthwhile reading it carefully. I will make sure to note your suggestions and apply these before moving forward (and as I do the 250box challenge)
Keep it up !
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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