Hi Dredd2701,
Great job completing the first lesson!
I'm also a beginner, so you can keep that in mind for this critique.
Lines
Your super-imposed lines are pretty good, but they all seem slightly arched instead of straight. Did you draw the initial lines with a ruler before drawing over them? If you are using a ruler for the first line, you might have arching because you're not drawing with your shoulder (which admittedly takes a lot of practice). Though arched, I don't see a lot wobble so that's good (not in your straight lines, maybe a little woble in your curves).
I think your short and mid-length lines are the best, with a bit of fraying only at one end. However, for the longer lines and all the curves, I see more fraying at both ends (and more error in general). It takes a little discipline when starting to draw your line to ensure that you've placed the pen at the correct starting point and not off.
I love your ghosted planes! I feel like you used the ghosting method and focused on making your lines straight. I also like that I don't see any corrective marks.
Ellipses
I think you nailed the ellipses section!(Pretty sure you did it better than I did).
On your tables, the ellipses are mostly kept within the bounds, each ellipse touching each other, without overlapping. It seems your circles tend not to touch the box in which they're bound, so maybe during warm-ups in the future do a couple rows of circles being mindful they touch the boundary.
On funnels, you the minor axis (the line in the middle) cuts ellipses in 2 symetrical halves for the most part. I think the line tends to be more off than the ellipses are. The larger ellipses on your corner funnels tend to be a tilted relative to the midline where instead the center of the ellipses should be aligned with the midline.
Boxes
In your rough perspective I see some lines with arch or wobble, but I think they get straighter as the lesson progresses, so you're on the right track. I think you are over-prioratizing the length of the line - all the lines seem to have the correct length but are not necessarily confident or correctly placed. Keep this is mind from the ghosting lines exercise description:
"..there are several levels of "success" with this exercise:
Level 1: Line is smooth and consistent without any visible wobbling, but doesn't quite pass through A or B, due to not following the right trajectory. It's a straight shot, but misses the mark a bit.
Level 2: Line is straight, smooth and consistent without any wobbling and maintains the correct trajectory. It does however either fall short or overshoot one or both points.
Level 3: Line is straight, smooth, consistent without any wobbling. It also starts right at one point and ends exactly at the other."
As I understand it, this prioritization remains true for future exercises.
Also on rough perspective, width lines should be parallel to horizon and height lines perpendicular to horizon. This is tricky and I think you accomplished it for a lot of the lines, but there are a handful that stray off diagonally.
Your rotated boxes are great! This is a tough exercise. I think on some boxes aren't rotating (at least along one of the two axes), but overall great.
(Here is an example image of boxes that don't rotate: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg).
Organic perspective is good. Even though you have tons of boxes, you were a little hesitant to overlap them. You'll add a lot more depth to your images when you aren't afraid to put items "in front" or "behind" others in the 3D space your representing.
Where you did choose to overlap boxes, you can add clarity by adding line weight to the appropriate lines to the box in front. Line weight should be added with a single confident stroke drawn over the original line using your shoulder.
And there you have it! Sorry if this was long! But I think you're more than ready to move on to the 250 box challenge, which should definitely help you get in the habit of drawing if you can complete it. Good luck and have fun!
Cheers,
Jac
Next Steps:
Move on to the 250 box challenge! Good luck!
Thank you very much for the critique Jac. I really appreciate it and will continue to work on my exercises. Thanks for pointing out my tendencies to arch the lines (I did not go over the lines with a ruler) and the other errors elsewhere.
Because you took so much time helping me out, I will take the time to offer my 2 cents to other people's work with the same amount of attention you've showed me. Thanks again and have a great week!
Best,
Dredd
I'm so happy to hear that, Dredd! Don't feel you need to put in as much work into your critique as I did (I have a tendency to go overboard), but I'm sure your notes will be very welcomed by the artist you help! Not only will it help them, but critiquing other students is a great way to learn yourself.
This tool is REALLY helpful in critiquing lesson one, please use it!: https://pastebin.com/dYnFt9PQ
P.S. Also, I believe the site has recently implemented something where if you have submissions waiting to be reviewed, they'll be higher up in the queue if you critique other submissions (and users agree with your critique).
A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.
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