Hey Jerry! I am paperhat and I will be doing your lesson 1 critique.

My critique will be divided into three sections:

Lines

• Super-imposed lines: Your lines are looking confident and not wobbly. That is great! There also is only fraying on one end, which shows that you have taken your time to start each line and did not rush the task. On the second page your longest lines are just a little arching (really not a lot). Arching might happen if you are not using your shoulder pivot. However, it might also happen if you use your shoulder pivot. In that case try to consciously arch in the opposite direction. Try to pay close attention on which pivot your are using. However, that arching is really minor and I cannot see it on your first page. So very good job!

• Ghosted Lines: Here your lines are looking a little less confident. This is probably because you were trying to be more accurate and hit the point. Try to draw every line as confident as possible even if you know you are not going to hit that end point. Accuracy will come over time, so confidence is way more imnportant right now! OVerall you did great though!

• Ghosted Planes: You lines look confident and quite accurate as well, well done! You also put a start and an end point for all you lines, this is exactly what we want to do in order to use the ghosting method correctly. Furthermore you made great use out of the paper space and tried different sizes and angles. Very well done!

Ellipses

• Tables Of Ellipses: Your ellipses are nicely touching and repeated two times, that is perfect! They also don't overshoot or undershoot very often. And they are also very smooth and not wobbly, which shows that you are drawing them with confidence. Nice work!

• Ellipses in Planes: These ellipses are looking confident as well! You also remembered to draw through them 2 to 3 times (for future reference: 2 times is preferred). Your accuracy is great here as well, most of your ellipses touch all four borders very nicely! However it is also not bad if they are overshooting or undershooting a little as long as they are confident.

• Funnels: You placed the minor axis correctly, cutting the ellipses in two halves! As before your ellipses are drawn confidently! Some of your ellipses are not touching each other in this exercise, the next time you try this exercise pay attention to that. It might help to not have the funnels overlap as much as they do at the moment. If you use this exercise in your warm-ups you also might want to try to change the degree of the ellispes according to their position within the funnel (as described here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/step3). Overall this looks great though!

Boxes

• Plotted Perspective: You draw through all your boxes and also use hatching to show which planes are facing the viewer. Your hatching is also very neat and makes your boxes look very nice! Great work!

• Rough Perspective: You draw through all your boxes and use the line correction method. Your lines look a little wobbly but overall still good. Your width lines are (mostly) parallel to the horizon and height lines perpendicular to the horizon. One thing I can notice is that your hatching is not always on the right plane, sometimes it is on a plane that is not facing the viewer. Here you can see which ones are wrong: https://imgur.com/a/JaHm7mS and here I marked the sides that are facing the viewer: https://imgur.com/a/vdjf2Tm (I did this with my mouse, so it does not look very great. But I hope it helps). If you hatch the correct sides it makes your boxes look better and less distorted/wrong.

• Rotated Boxes: : You keep the corners between boxes close and rotate the boxes. You also draw through all the boxes. Your hatching is nice and neat again and makes your boxes stand out better. One thing you could have done to make your boxes stand out even more is to add some lineweight to the silhouette . This is a hard and frustrating task and you still followed through very well, good job!

• Organic Perspective: : Your lines here are confidently drawn. You have a variety of box sizes and angles and also tried overlapping some boxes (although you could have added even more overlaps and even steeper angles. But this is already great!). The next time you try this exercise (e.g. in your warm-ups) you might also try to apply some lineweight, this helps with distinguishing which boxes is in front of another one. Overall this looks good!

Overall I think you have done a solid and good job. You should be very proud of yourself for making it this far and sticking with it! It think you are ready to take on the next challenge. Good luck!