Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
6:43 AM, Saturday February 19th 2022
all crtisisms are invited
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2:42 PM, Tuesday February 22nd 2022
Hello kelchi1v1,
I will go through the assignments one by one to go into detail as necessary:
Your superimposed lines show varying degree of care, I think. The trajectories show that you are able to make clean, confident strokes, but the fraying on the starting side on many of your lines show that you probably did not take the time to aim carefully for the start of the original line. One thing this and the other "mark making" exercises are supposed to teach you is to not rush into the mark making.
However, since you already show a decent accuracy, I do not think you should redo this assignment. (I will give a small suggestion at the end of the critique.)
Your ghosted lines look good: Very confident, close to no wobblyness and you end up fairly close to your dots!
Your ghosted planes also look fine. But I will comment on those massive dots! I would make them smaller, similarly to your first(?) ghosted lines page. Just a small point, that will even become invisible if your lines end up where they are supposed to. It will make your assignments look much cleaner this way.
Ellipses in planes: I don't know which page comes first, but one page has very neatly fitting ellipses and the other has a varying degree to which the ellipses touch all the edges. Maybe that were the first practice ellipses, but just in case I will remind you to always ghost your marks to optimize your lines before you draw them. Same goes for the tables and the funnels as well.
Plotted perspective: Well done!
Rough perspective: those big dots are a bit distracting from the more important lines, but all in all their construction looks decent. Deviations in the vanishing points are to be expected and can be quite instructional for discovering one's own biases. You also seem to improve within those two pages already, so: Well done!
Rotated boxes: Well done! The construction of the sphere went quite well, I see! :)
I am a bit puzzled by some of the lines, though. Did you correct some of them? I know that especially with this exercise it is very tempting to do so, but in general we are supposed to decide beforehand what mark we want to make and stick to this decision even if we make mistakes.
Organic perspective: Again, there are some corrected lines I think? Which make me ask: Are you still ghosting your lines?
There are some mistakes in perspective (such as parallel lines diverting with increasing distance from the viewer), but you did make an effort to rotate your boxes and you scaled them according to distance, so I think you have full understanding of the main goal of the exercise and you will have ample of opportunities to practice perspective in the upcoming challenge.
Taken together I think you can move on to the 250 box challenge.
My suggestion though: I would use some of the lesson 1 assignments as warmups before you do a set of boxes. Be mindful of the whole markmaking thing: The drawing from the shoulder, the conscious planning, the ghosting, the confident stroke. This should get you into the mindset to do so on the boxes themselves as well!
I wish you all the best for the upcoming lessons and challenges!
Jack
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