12:10 PM, Saturday May 29th 2021
Hello Shuub,
Thank you for reuploading your work, I will be reviewing some of your work today, I hope that my critique is helpful to you.
Superimposed Lines
First things first, I can see fraying on one side mostly, which is great, but there are some times where you didn't take that extra care. Remember to always be patient while doing these exercises, taking the extra time to line the tip of your pen with the start of your line, this is very important as it's how you add proper lineweight and make your lines nice and smooth instead of messy.
You seem to draw unconfidently, as your lines are not straight and are instead wobbling along their length as you try to keep their accuracy. Don't forget that accuracy is irrelevant for dab exercises, instead we want confident, smooth lines before anything else.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/8/wobbling
You also seem to not be superimposing your lines quite enough for most of them, when you revisit this exercise in your warm ups, try to keep it around 8 times.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/8/exercise
Ghosted Lines
No redoing lines, I can see that you've tried to fix some of your ghosted lines but a mistake is a mistake, you cannot correct it with a new line, therefore you should just let it be, work around it and make that a learning experience so you don't commit the same mistake next time.
When it comes to your lines they still have noticeable wobbling, arching, and overshooting. I can see improvement in some of your lines though, so good job.
Keep practicing this exercise as a warm up to keep developing your skills, and remember to prioritize confidence above all. If you find yourself having trouble with arching and overshooting in the future, try these.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/arc
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/lifthand
Ghosted Planes
Again no redoing lines, you've done mostly good work on the perspective of your planes, some more variation would've been best however.
When it comes to your lines you have not added the dots for each of your lines, which shows me that you are not using the ghosting method correctly when it comes to this exercise.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/video
You need to put dots and ghost every line that you put down, including the + inside your planes. This is also true for every exercise you will encounter in this course, unless otherwise specified we'll always be using the ghosting method.
Table of Ellipses
I want you to make sure you're re-reading the exercise page for each of these assignments not just once, but everytime you attempt these exercises again. While Uncomfortable tried to make these lessons as easy to understand as possible, there is still a lot of information and you'll need to revisit it more than once to digest all of it.
For some of your ellipses, you're drawing through them too much, and for some only once. You should strive for 3 to 2 times, ideally 2. Drawing through your ellipses too much will make them feel crowded and messy, and only drawing once won't make them look nice and smooth. Which is why drawing through them 2 times is the perfect balance.
Good job on fitting them mostly inside the page, they do overlap and go out of bounds but that's expected and you'll improve with time. It would also be good to see you try a wider variety of degrees for your ellipses, try to remember this in your warm ups.
Ellipses in Planes
Good job on making your ellipses follow the general shape of your planes. I can see some who wobble quite a bit, meaning you tried to focus on accuracy too much though, so don't forget to put smooth and confident ellipses above accuracy just like with lines.
Refer back to the points in Table of ellipses to see what you could have done to execute your homework page better.
Funnels
It would've been good if you had tried to make your ellipses wider as they approach the edge of your funnel. Being able to draw a wide variety of ellipses will be especially useful in later exercises. You're still drawing through your ellipses too much, and you've had some trouble aligning your minor axis, remember that the minor axis cuts the ellipse into two equal parts.
Plotted Perspective
You have not followed the instructions for this exercise.
You did not plot your lines back to your vanishing point after your first frame, and repeated many lines.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/purpose
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/example
Rough Perspective
You have also not followed the instructions for this exercise correctly, instead you treated this exercise like plotted perspective.
It's pretty clear to me that you used a ruler, this exercise is the introduction to guessing your vanishing point, and getting you used to the fact that your lines converge.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/purpose
You should have ghosted your lines instead of using a ruler, and you've also redone many of your lines.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/plottinglines
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/example
Rotated Boxes
You did a good job trying to rotate the boxes, you did make box's edges bigger than the previous though, in perspective this would mean that the box is bigger than the one in front of it, which is not the point of this exercise, as all boxes should be the same size, just rotating which is why they will look smaller as they rotate away from the center box.
You forgot to draw through some of your boxes as well, you need to draw through all of them even if it starts to feel cluttered as that will help you develop your understanding of 3d space.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/notdrawingthrough
Remember to not rush, go at your own pace for these exercises. Otherwise you won't get the most out of it. Don't worry about the result of your rotated boxes though, you'll get much more experience once you tackle the 250 boxes challenge.
Organic Perspective
Good job on organic perspective! You seem to have understood the exercise, although it would've been nice to see you add more boxes and a wide variety of shapes.
I will not be moving you onto 250 boxes challenge just yet, as I feel you misunderstood the point of some exercises.
Are you on the Drawabox discord server?
https://discord.com/invite/FtSS4hhqSu
If not, I strongly suggest that you join if possible.
Everyone is very nice and kind in that community, and they'll be more than glad to assist you as you go through your lessons, you can also ask for any clarifications in the Lesson channels if you didn't quite understand something about an exercise or concept Dab seeks to teach.
Re-read the instructions for the exercises, and reply to me with the pages I'll ask for below.
Next Steps:
Please read over the exercise pages again and then please reply with:
1 Page of Plotted Perspective exercise
1 Page of Rough Perspective exercise